siaru wrote:

Oh, really?

	Oh, no.

I should think it would be more like...

	Mr. Tymes Vs. Siaru Stormbringer: Round One.

---
Kagato gently parted the chains and helped her to her feet,
somehow being missed by the spooled lengths of chain as they
spilled off the slab, then turned, confused. "I feel that I
should start with the galley... but there are lives to be spared
first, aren't there? I'm so confused."

	Repetition of 'chains' in the first line.

Kasumi paused in pulling on her skirt to shake her head sadly, a
hint of sympathy in her voice. "I did warn you."

---

Or something like that

	Round One, winner: Siaru.

siaru

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