On Mon, Sep 02, 2002 at 10:22:16PM -0700, Tannim Murphy wrote:
Genma kicked Ranma while the martial artist was still down. "Boy!
Don't be so lazy!" The old man finished off the last of Ranma's food.
"You've got training to do!"
Ranma looked up from his position on the floor. "Why don't I hit YOU
with a table, and see how you feel?!" asked Ranma in exasperation.
The martial artist paused at the thought. "Hey, that might not be
...a coupla places here, you're using "the martial artist"
rather than "Ranma", and I noticed the repetition. This second
use could be adequately replaced by "he", since you're not
trying to sneak a gendershift past us readers, and the whole
paragraph's about Ranma anyway.
such a bad idea!" he exclaimed.
Genma blinked as Ranma rose up from the ground, table in hand. "Now
...did Ranma steal the floor supports _again_? No _wonder_ Genma
sealed the Umisen-Ken!
now, boy, don't be too hasty..." he said nervously.
"C'mon, pop," said Ranma with a nasty gleam in his eye. "You wanted
me to train? Fine, I'll train!"
*WHAM!*
The table hit Genma, and Genma went flying. Right into the koi Pond.
...even though the pond is in the capital, it shouldn't get one.
<Boy! Look what you've done!> the most recently held-aloft sign said.
*knock knock*
"Oh! Someone's at the door."
Kasumi went to the door, but when she opened it, Soun rushed past her
and grabbed the person standing there in a bear hug. "Usagi! It's me,
Uncle Soun! Oh, how nice it is to see you again!"
"Unhand me, knave! Thou thinkest me this 'Usagi,' then thou thinkest
...there's an "If" missing from the beginning of this sentence.
If you really want to butcher Elizabethan, you can use "An" instead.
wrongfully indeed."
"'Thinkest?' is that even a word?" wondered Nabiki as Ranma set the
battered table back down in place.
Soun let Kuno go, and dusted himself off. Kuno continued ranting: "Be
you any other boor, I'd smite the, however, you be-ith the father of
...Again, in the interest of completing the corruption of the
Queen's English:
Wert thou any other [boor? try 'knave', but there are
better alternatives], I would smite thee, however, as thou art
...and I'm sure that there are Renfaire and SCA veterans who can
do a lot better than my contribution.
I did notice that, in the rest of his speech, he gets steadily
more modern. Got tired of the thee-thou ride?
the wondrous Akane Tendo, I shall swallow my pride and settle for less
than that which this situation verily calls for." He tapped Soun on
the head with his bokken, very lightly. "You've been punished for
attacking Kuno. Be grateful you've been spared your life. Now...
Akane Tendo, I'm here to free you from that foul sorcerer Saotome once
and for all! Then you will be free... free to leap into my arms and
smother me with-"
The table, this time thrown like a Frisbee, hit Kuno square in the
face and sent him back out the door. Be it Ranma's skill, simple
luck, or an unspoken law of the universe, Kasumi, who had been
standing almost perfectly between Kuno and Ranma, wasn't touched. "Oh
my," she said, blinking and still trying to figure out the physics of
it. Was it possible for the table to curve like that?
...The table curved? Not just its flight-path? Okay, that makes
it official, there's a Principle Of Anime Physics at work here: No one
hits Kasumi.
---
Rei was worried. Usagi hadn't shown up at the shrine during the usual
meeting time, and calling her via the emergency line only found an
exasperated Luna. She eventually got from Luna that Usagi's parents
had gone on vacation suddenly, and shipped Usagi off to live somewhere
else without any warning. They even forgot about her when they left,
...it took two tries for me to decode that last 'her' as
referring to Luna. Might want to use the name instead.
so eager were they to be on their way.
---
End Part Three!
Authors Notes:
Tannim: Even for us, this part is pretty short. Do not fret loyal
fans! For we are concocting a couple of side stories that should
I wasn't trying to fret loyal fans; I do that to guitars,
generally.
bring our usual meager contribution back up to par. Kagato should
have posted his, and mine is on the way. Kagato's side story is 100%
his, and is in no way edited by me.
I tried to convince him otherwise, but he wouldn't let me. ^_^
Also, unfortunately, I have been banned by Kagato to edit his Author
banned from editing
Notes. Sorry about this.
"heh. Another piece done. Send C&C to TaitekiKagato@aol.com as well..
since half of this is mine... Hey! look.. there's a typo in my
sidestory.. and.. another.. ::sigh:: and another.. I hate my spell
checker." -Kagato
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