Sorry about the delay.  Life got in the way.


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From: <DorianVal@aol.com>
To: <karaohki@snet.net>; <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Monday, August 26, 2002 3:33 AM
Subject: Re: [FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma]A Change of Scene, chapters 94-96

I've been meaning to comment on this for a while. Time to stop being so

lazy.

"Yes, and I think the fever is gone.  Ranma stopped
thrashing around."  Nabiki laughed.  "It's a wonder
he hasn't given Akane a black eye with all the
tossing and turning."

No, the real wonder is that Ranma's been sleeping in the same bed as

Akane

for six months or so and hasn't been put into a bodycast because of all

her

thrashing around.

Well...the "Akane's violent in her sleep" was only shown in one portion of
the manga, where Happosai hit Akane's sleep spot and she clobbered him in
her sleep.  Ryoga then tells Ranma that she's that way all the time, but
you never see it again, so I tend to think he was laying it on a little
thick.

When Ranma sneaked in on Akane sleeping way back when she first adopted
"P-chan", she was sleeping quite peacefully, and you don't see this
violent sleeping behavior anywhere but in the one story arc.  My personal
take is that she was aware of Happosai's presence and defending in her
sleep (yeah, I know I'm stretching it!), and that she wouldn't want to
clobber her husband in her sleep.

[snip]

The Big Revelation

"Your mother was in a hurry to have grandchildren,
because it doesn't look like it will be possible for
her and I to have any more children."

I dunno, maybe it was because of several months of wondering what Genma

was

going to tell Ranma, but this came as something of a let down. Oh well,
pay-off almost never lives up to the anticipation.

Aww, drat.  I can't help it - I write very slowly lately.

Ranma flinched.  His parents were trying to have
another child?  For a moment all he could picture
was what it would be necessary for them to do in
order to have one, and that concept kept him from
speaking.  That was all the opportunity his father
needed to keep talking without interruption

Yep. No one EVER likes to think of their parents having normal human
impulses, habits and drives, let alone acting on them.

That is SO true

It was Ranma's turn to get up.  He pulled his hand
out of Akane's and turned his back on his father for
a minute.  Then he turned back and looked his father
in the eye.  "I don't remember her from before our
trip.  You know that.  Then I got stuck pretending I
was a girl, so that's how she treated me!  It was
kinda nice when we all lived together at the Tendos'
house, but after Jusendo you two moved out and I
stayed there.  I really wanted a chance to get to
know Mom, but I never got it!  I don't even know how
to talk to her!"

Perhaps you should write some chapters about Ranma and Akane staying at

his

parents house sometime. The phone conversation later on in the story was

just

a first step, but if he really wants to get to know his Mom then

spending

some vac. time at the Saotome house is necessary.

That's a very good suggestion.  Thank you.

"Mom!  We're supposed to be making up, not fighting!
I didn't say I don't love you, and I'm not saying I
don't respect you, [SNIP]

I wonder how much of the later part is true. I remember Jan Story

stating in

one of her story notes that Ranma calls his mom Ofukuro-  honorable

bag...

Well his tact does leave something to be desired, but he does love his
mother.

Akane heard some sniffling before Nodoka spoke
again.  "I've driven you away, haven't I?  You hate
me, don't you?"

I dunno, maybe I'm just cruel, but Nodoka going out in full fledge Soun

mode,

arcing showers of tears and all, strikes me as hilarious.

It's supposed to!

Tatewaki chuckled and sat down on the bed, pulling
his wife down beside him.  "Technically, my father
still holds that title, but--" he lifted a hand to
stop the objection Nabiki was already starting to
make--"he did give up any rights to the position
when he ran back to Hawaii.  It is now my
responsibility to take care of my sister, and that
is a very delicate situation.  I will have to give a
great deal of thought to the matter."

This should prove interesting...

"Let me get this straight.  Nabiki Tendo is married
to Tatewaki Kuno and nobody knew about it?  She
married one of the richest guys we know and didn't
have a huge, fancy wedding?"  Ukyo paused for a
moment, deep in thought.  Then her eyes widened and
she snapped her fingers.  "I've got it!  She's HAS
to be pregnant!"

And wacky hi-jinxs ensue. Soun with spear and full armor chasing Kuno

around

Nerima should be worth the wait...

Giggle.  Yeah

"That makes sense to me.  Perhaps Ukyo is right."

"I wish I understood how women think!"

Join the club, bub.

Are we that difficult?

Twenty minutes later a very exhausted Akane
stretched out on one of the lounges and watched
Ranma and Shiro roughhousing in the deep end.
Shampoo was beside her on another lounge, half
asleep.

(Waves fan around) Akane and Shampoo lounging around in swimsuits! Fan
service galore! Woo hoo!

*takes a bow*




P]

Fun as always. I think you mentioned to someone that Shampoo is

pregnant.

I'll be curious to see if Akane starts getting jealous of her again,

though

for obviously different reasons.

The friendship between the two girls is rather new.  This may put a small
strain on it for a while.

Thanks again for your comments.  I hope to get this monster revised and
off my mind so I can work on Cinders!

June




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