Used the grammar comments.

"Oh, really?" Kachiko gained a wicked gleam in her eye. "Does that mean
you'd rent me that long, cylindrical, battery-powered object you have
stashed in the back of your sock drawer?"

That made Nabiki freeze. Slowly, she said, "If the price was right."

"And how much would my silence about its existence be worth?"

The ironic thing is that what Kachiko saw was Nabiki's emergency
flashlight.  The other long, cylindrical, battery-powered object was

behind

it.

Heh. You never know. It could have been.

Perhaps Kachiko wasn't the best judge of ages above thirty. It wasn't

like

she gave it much consideration. Once a person hit thirty, it was all
downhill from there as far as she was concerned. And she certainly had

no

interest in anyone over the age of thirty. That was way too old to be a
friend or romantic interest, in her opinion. So why would someone in

their

thirties care if a person made a guess at their age and it was five or

ten

{: or sixteen} years off? At that point it didn't matter anymore. It was

splitting hairs.

Old was old.

I think Ranma's still sixteen at this point.

She's thinking in more abiguous terms.

She only had enough time to blink twice before reaching the height of

the

leap and falling back down to earth. The landing was feather light, as

she

found herself held in another's arms in almost the same manner that she

was

holding the child.

Except she's not going to complain about an inappropriate touch.

Heh.True.

Hiroyoshi rubbed his eyes, sniffled, then leveled an accusatory finger

at

Kachiko. "That woman touched my bottom in a way that made me

uncomfortable."

Kahiko was right.  That kid is a definite sociopath who will make
everyone's lives miserable.

Obviously he's already working on it. :)

matter drop, convinced Kachiko wouldn't want to talk about it in front

of

others, and that his interest might be misinterpreted by everyone else

as

something other than casual. Best to forget about the whole thing rather
than allow it the chance to further complicate his life.

Well reasoned and far too late.

Nah.In this case, he dropped the line of questioning in time.

"Thank goodness." Nodoka doubted if she could have approved of a such a
pairing. She stated firmly, "You must be more careful in the future.

I'll be

sure to get you some rubbers before the next time."

"Aw, come on Mom."

"A raincoat with a hood would have been more useful."

"..."

Heh

Kasumi looked at the picture in question. It was a photo of the two of

them

side-by-side in matching aprons. Kasumi noted they were quite the

mismatched

pair, one so much {older : younger} than the other, wearing as much food

on her clothing

as what was in the bowl. There wasn't even much of a family resemblance.

The

only thing that was similar were their smiles, which were exactly the

same.

It was one of Kasumi's favorite pictures, which made the current

situation

seem all the more depressing. "Yes," Kasumi said, quietly.

I think the following clause refers to Kasumi being covered with food, so
it would read better if she was the one mentioned before it.  Of course,
there's nothing that says Kachiko can't be a mess and Kasumi neat.

Good point. Will change.

Thanks for the additional help.

D.B. Sommer

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