Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Wed, 14 Aug 2002 21:20:53 -0400 Sam Vilsmeier <syp104@email.psu.edu> wrote:
Haruka grabbed Ranma by the collar, and pushed him against one of the
alley walls. "I hope your sister was telling the truth, you little
worm. You damn well BETTER marry {her, if : her. If} you don't, I'll cut your
damned balls off! You hear me? I will fucking KILL YOU!"
Ranma rolled his eyes. "No I didn't. I said I could beat ya
transformed, I never said how you'd have to transform or what ya turn
in to, did I?" Ranma looked at the interior of the eatery and added,
"Besides, this place is as dead as {the come : it gets : they come}, and no one in here prolly
gives half a damn what we say and even if they do they'll just think
that we're delusional morons."
Ranma sighed. "That don't mean you could match people like me, who've
dedicated their entire lives to the Art in one on one personal combat.
While those skimpy outfits of yours might give ya a boost and stuff,
but it ain't enough ta make up for skill."
You should remove either "While" or "but" from the last sentence.
Haruka smirked. "Sure... maybe {this'll : that'll} make you see reason."
"Yep, while he probably came up with it to fill his fat stomach{: ,} it does
work." replied Ranma.