Bad writer. Just sending out bunches of teasers instead of working on the
stories. :)

    Hi! Knight Writer here with a crazy idea. I recently purchased seven

volumes of the Gun Smith Cats manga,

One of the few I collect (due to financial restraints.) Love the series,
though never felt up to capturing the flavor with only the written word. A
lot of it's visual action oriented. It'll be interesting to see how this
plays out. Punny certainly fits in with the flavor though.

            "You light up, and I'll cap you myself," Rico snarled, tracing

the bulge beneath his jacket where the Colt pistol was holstered. "I don't
need you stoned if the shit hits the fan, you hear?"

            "I hear ya," Mark said. "I was just sayin', that's all.

Kidnapping for ransom, it's a wonder the Feds ain't got us yet."

            "We told the parents what would happen if they called any

cops," Rico replied. He didn't add that he truly hoped it wouldn't come to
that. Shooting kids wasn't a prospect that he particularly relished. "Five
million bucks, man. Five million and the rest of our lives in Tahiti!"

Mark: I thought we were going to Haiti

Rico: I'd rather go to jail than that hole.

            Tahiti, huh? Well, punk, you're going somewhere warm alright,

but it's not tropical and a lot hotter than the islands.

Hmm. First person is a bit jarring.

            "What can go wrong?" Mark asked, even though he dimly recalled

someone saying that such was a question you simply didn't ask.

            "Nothin', man," Rico replied, lighting his fifth Newport of

the night. "I'm tellin' ya, this is comin' off without a hitch. Rich bastard
like Max Jameson can spare five mil' like pocket change, man. You ain't
heard about how much CEO's are paid?"

            "Livin' in goddamn palaces. Spendin' hundreds of millions on

those places an' rippin' off investors. He deserves it."

            "Got that right, brother."

Heh. The justification is a nice touch.

            He's wasting ammo, firing at shadows like that. Rico doesn't

have a clue that I'm behind him, now, and sneaking up. I count his shots,
knowing he's empty just before his Colt dry-fires. Typical wanna-be,
thinking that a big and powerful gun makes him invincible. He even pulls the
trigger a few times before thinking to get another clip.

mag (short of magazine)

"How do you know.?"

            "Mark's dead just beside you," I explain, like a teacher to a

slow child, "Leo has a broken neck out front, and Clem's heart is in two
halves by the pisser. You're alone, Rico."

            "Yeah? Well, how about."

            "Save it, shithead. You're out of friends, and out of luck."

Actually Frank doesn't swear that much, unless the situation is bad, as I
recall.

            "Are you gonna ask him?"

            "Why not? It could be another job."

That would be interesting. Punny's got better tactical sense, but Rally's a
better shot. And given Punny's ear to the ground, he knows Rally goes out of
her way to bring bounties alive, so he won't go for the kill with her. Bean
might be another matter, though, even if he did discontinue running drugs,
he's still working for bad guys most of the time.

            "How bad was it?" Giovanni asked.

            "Twelve men dead, ten million worth of heroin up in flames,

and the payoff missing."

yep. That's Frank.

Interesting premise. Punny was melodramatic with the last guy, but you're
setting things up for readers that might not be familiar with him, so it'll
be okay to let it slide. We'll see what you do with it.

D.B. Sommer

D.B. Sommer



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