You wrote:

1943:

 He was a tall man with a mask-like face.

'mask-like' in what way, since there are so many kinds of masks? Or do you
mean the flesh seems artificial?

 His hawkish

profile was evident as he surveyed the entire room.
Military uniforms dominated the room though some were
dressed like him, three-piece suits that bespoke of power
and influence.

They were Armanis. Gotta love them. :)

 "Good evening, gentlemen... and lady." The last
part was addressed to a woman who looked to be out of place.

Mostly due to the clown face and squeeky shoes she wore.

 "Several months ago the SS-Ahnenerbe unearthed what
be one of the most important archeological finds in modern
history. One that could change the course of the war."

 On the screen, was a picture of a room filled with
incomprehensible gadgets. The walls were filled with
drawings. A large crescent moon was depicted on the far
wall.

Hmm. I'd like more detail to the room to capture the power that's supposed
to lie within.

 "This, gentlemen, is a weapons cache from one of
the several advanced civilizations from before recorded
history. Everyone here is acquainted with the our

drop 'the'

government's previous encounters with artifacts from
these ancient times and

times, and

 "Everyone, this is an Azathoth device. For those
who recognize the name but do not recognize its
significance, Azathoth is more than a children's story
character by Mr. Lovecraft. It is an amorphous force
that is near-catastrophic if ever focused and released
in the manner that these devices do. The last time an
Azathoth device was detonated was in 1908 at Tunguska.
I believe everyone here knows where that is and what
happened there. The Ahnenerbe found five such devices."

My, that is bad.

 "He is assisted and protected by SS Hauptscharfuhrer
Hans Scwharzkirk. I believe that the people in this room
are more familiar with his monicker 'Golden Adonis'. P
rating 3 but a certified genius and a scientifically-trained
'super-man', he can be expected to counter any of our normal
sabotage and infiltration operations that we would use for
this particular situation."

I fear my lack of knowledge hamstrings me with that character.

 Another click and a picture of what looks like
a facility carved into the mountainside.

 "Schloss Drachenrauche, a castle literally carved
out of the mountainside.

You just said that in the previous  paragraph. perhaps 'grown from the side
of the mountain' or somesuch other phrase for the first one, since he's
speaking the second.

 "Our resources maybe

may be

 tapped out. But our allies are

not. A group consisting of several individuals from Allied
countries chosen for their 'special' attributes and skills
to be able to infiltrate into Drachenrauche."

 "And who would these 'individuals' be"

Teenage girls with magic pens. :)

 Cranston smiled before he moved out of the line of
sight, melding into the shadows. A click and a picture of
six men was shown.

I guess not. :(

 "From France, or rather from the French, we have
Arsene Lupin II. I believe most everyone in this room is
familiar with his father. I assure that the son is twice
as skilled and a lot less irritating than he is.

Aww. But that's half the fun of the Wolf. :)

 A click and a tall, lithe young man was shown in
British military uniform.

 "Colonel Thomas Cecil Clayton of the British Special
Operations. He's quite a success in the African sector and
his family has a reputation for men who have uncanny skills.
His grandfather is the current Lord Greystoke and you all
know what that man did during the war.

This one or the last one?

 "The last two members will be my old friend Miss Margo
Lane and the individual known as 'The Shadow'.

"Not that fob."

"Oh, shut up," Cranston bit back.

This isn't exactly a vignette. This is more like a prelude.

Indeed. But a good one.

"Where Eagle Would Never Dare" is supposed to be one of the
big stories in the Dance sequence. As you may have noticed
we have several big shots in the line-up, from this world's
version of Doc Savage to the Shadow, not to mention Keele
Lorenz from NGE. It has several effects on the history
not to mention spawning some other stories and vignettes.

I like Doc Savage a lot, but I think him showing up is
becoming... too normal.

Heh. Depends on what you read, those he was one of the more memorable
characters from back then.

Nice work. Flowed well, introd the cast of characters, and set up the
scenario easily. Look forward to more

D.B. Sommer



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