At 19:24 08/04/2002 -0500, you wrote:

Missed this one... ^_^;

`Sokay? `Salright.

He glimpsed over at the Manor again, and this time a lack of
motionlessness was present.  Chloe was exiting the building.

?  'He glimpsed over' isn't passive.  Or did you mean the second sentance?  I
did get a priv reply saying that the sentence did read okay, so I'll leave
this unless I get more responses saying the opposite.

"He glimpsed over[...]" isn't passive, but "[...]a lack of motionlessness 
was present[...]" is.  And, now that you've brought my attention to it, the 
sentence is actually a run-on.

Hah!  Correct not the grammar-nazi, for you will get screwed twice 
over...or something....  ^_^;;;

Have to wonder how long it'll take before he becomes anemic and his body
starts canniblizing itself for protein...

Well, he did get some bread in that sandwich, plus whatever else it was made
of.  But yeah, he'd start accumulating problems before too long.  But I don't
think it'd be an issue this quickly.

Makes me think of One Piece, where some characters have a major case of
scurvy, eat a couple of oranges, and are instantly better.  ^_^;

Heh...must be some damn-good oranges...



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