Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Mon, 29 Jul 2002 04:55:49 EDT Starrngr@aol.com wrote:
Well, after {stuggling : struggling} though a {reall : real} creative lull and more than a touch of
writers block, The floodgates have re-opened...
Welcome back.
Where can I find the end of Book 2?
I looked in http://home.talkcity.com/TheSanitarium/Da_Muck/ and found Book
2 only through Chapter 12. Sofaspud has even less. Fanfiction.net
wouldn't show me Book 2 though it did have Book 1.
Ryouga, meet Fred. Oh, I see you two have already met. {by : By} accident.
The lost boy went flying; slamming into a tree as Muck brought the now
skidding Fred to a complete stop. Cursing wildly in three languages,
two of which didn't even exist in this particular Fica, Muck ran to
where Ryouga had come to rest, first aid kit in hand. He'd slammed on
the brakes as soon as he'd seen the kid, sure, but they'd still been
moving a good 40 mph when he'd hit the kid! That meant broken bones,
probable internal injuries, and a whole lot of official attention
without a cover identity. He knelt beside the still figure, which
groaned once before Muck's head exploded in pain.
I'll bet that really hurt... FRED.
"Then you might wanna get in on this side. FRED here is American
drive."
This is the first time you wrote FRED in all caps in this chapter. Since
that was the style you used in the earlier books, you should probably do a
global search and replace.
Because of this, both human passengers breathed a mental sigh of
relief {as Thunders-sama (Call me `Muck', please,) :} as Highway 8 merged
with the streets of the Nerima ward of Tokyo. Muck was about to ask
Ryouga for directions, even though he KNEW what was going to happen,
when the point was solved for him. He slammed on the brakes as a black
haired martial artist in red and black bounded across the street in
front of him. Chasing Ranma Satome were all the usual suspects; in
order, Akane, still in her school jumper, Shampoo, Ukyou, Kodachi Kuno,
Mouse, and Tatawaki Kuno. Ryouga, seeing this, instantly leapt from
the car and joined the tail end of the chase, bellowing at the top of
his lungs about Ranma making Akane chase him.
No sooner than the last of the procession had disappeared from
view, final proof that this was all too common here manifested itself
as traffic started moving again as if this had been nothing more than a
simple red light! Muck was a second late moving with the traffic
because he was still in shock at seeing the Nerima wrecking crew live
and in person, so to speak; this prompted a blare of angry horns behind
him urging him to move along. Instead, Muck turned into the driveway
of a convenient {Mc Donalds : McDonalds} and parked, then started bouncing his head
off the steering wheel.
Muck was quiet for a long moment, then sighed. "I still don't
like this, Fred. But if you're right and I'm gonna be stuck in the
central role of what feels to me like a particularly bad piece of fan-
fiction, we'd best see about getting ourselves established around here.
And Fred?"
Problems with your self-esteem? :}b
Muck leaned back and stretched before returning his attention to
the web page in front of him. He'd guessed right, because the Nerima
Public Library did, in fact, have public access to this fica's version
of the Internet. And the study carrels the computers were in allowed
him to surreptitiously connect the data-link from Fred's remote into
the back. So, while he appeared to be browsing some random web pages,
Fred was hacking through the back alleys of the `net, quietly creating
the needed entries to establish them as legal residents. Muck had
wisely included a number of jewels in the things he carried from fica
to fica, so getting cash was a simple matter of finding a jeweler and
selling a couple. The ongoing cost of life in this city would put a
strain on that, though, so a job was an imperative; that meant getting
into the right computers to forge the documents he'd have had if he'd
come to Japan in the normal way. Even with FRED doing the real work,
it was still taking forever, though. It looked like Muck was probably
going to have to find a {Hotel : hotel} for tonight and find a room in the
morning. He scanned the links at the bottom of the web page, before
deciding on one called `Tales of the Wanderer'. As the page came up on
the screen, he felt his jaw drop. Only {the : a} hastily {remember : remembered} fact kept
a shout of shock from his lips as he took in the page.
::Great. Download this web-site to your onboard storage.::
Especially books 3 through 19.
The pair drove in silence, taking random turns, for about a half
an hour when a sign caught Muck's eye. `The Tea {fleet : Fleet} bar?' he thought
to himself, `now there's an interesting pun for you.' He was still
shaken (and a bit stirred up) and there was parking nearby, so he
decided it was as good a place as any other.
"Oh? What did you do, join the fire brigade?"
"Nothing quite so dangerous. I'm a high school teacher."
Now it was Muck's turn to snicker. "What's so dangerous about
that?"
"At Furikan High."
The fire brigade bomb squad would be safer.
I noticed Muck's luck with coffee remains consistent.