Larry F wrote:
"Sounds like a challenge, Ranma m'boy!" the man cackled.
"Your father Genma may
,Genma,
You sure? He's not being addressed, so I'm not positive it's neccessary.
** I agree with you. Nothing wrong with the sentence as written.
There have been comments that disagree, so until we can figure out how
this one really works, I'm going to just rephrase that bit.
it does seem a bit wordy for the action that just happened. Could be just
me, though.
I like the imagery, but I was going for something along the lines of
Hitokiri/Kenshin for Ranma's normal state and his current state. Not
sure if it worked, though. Consensus?
** I understood the idea that he sealed the Anything Goes techniques,
but see my note below for the whole opinion.
Alrighty.
Only because he didn't put his mind to it. He could come up with anything,
given time.
Actually.... This is very important.
Later.
** The thing that bothers me a little is that you don't use the
Nichiezu-based techniques consistently in this story. He kept the Mouko
Takabisha (admittedly, a technique that is purely his) and the Hiryuu Shoten
Ha, but not the Kachuu Tenshin Amaguriken? That was his very first special
technique, and had nothing to do with Happousai or Anything Goes. Why would
he use the HSH but not the Amaguriken? Did you drop it so that Seta would
have a chance at beating him?
The KTA? I always thought that was training, not a technique. It's used
as a technique in the anime, and in some fanfics, but in the manga it's
mostly just the name of the exercise, not an actual attack. I think
Ranma's most powerful attack would be his improvised momentum tricks,
really....
Not sure. This could be a manga/anime thing. It could just be me. O_o?
Ja mata,
Larry F
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