In a message dated 7/15/2002 10:38:13 AM US Mountain Standard Time,
sommer@3rdm.net writes:
Since my mind isn't quite coherent enough to start work on the next chapter
of Things, and I only got an hour left before worktimes, we'll take
something that requires less brainpower and do some C+C: :)
(Burns) Ah, excellent. (malevolent finger-to-finger tapping) ^_^
> "That makes TWO times in a row I ain't been ready!" the young
> man muttered angrily, slapping a fist into one hand. "First Rei gets
> me with her ki-attack and THEN the Jade-guy. Grrr, what NEXT?! Oh
> yeah, THEN I had to get rescued by a GIRL." He paused. "Well, two
> girls. A manly girl and a lady-girl-type, sort of..."
Heh.
I was informed that it probably wouldn't matter what sort of girl Ranma
was rescued by, so it now reads:
"That makes TWO times in a row I ain't been ready!" the young
man muttered angrily, slapping a fist into one hand. "First Rei gets
me with her ki-attack and THEN the Jade-guy. Grrr, what NEXT?! Oh
yeah, THEN I had to get rescued by a GIRL." He paused. "Well, two
girls."
Streamlined, sort of. ^_^
> The boy stopped again, considering the girl in the obnoxiously-
> cut sailor suit that had tried to defend him as well, but had failed.
> "Sailor Moon? What kind of a name is that? Sounds Chinese."
Heh
I missed another potential joke, but Jussi Nikander graciously provided
it:
The boy stopped again, considering the girl in the obnoxiously-
cut sailor suit that had tried to defend him as well, but had failed.
"Sailor Moon? What kind of a name is that? Sounds Chinese. Or maybe
Swedish. Besides, aren't all Swedes supposed to be blonde? Hey,
Haruka's blonde! Does that mean she's Swedish? No, wait..."
He hadn't
> heard of her before, but one thing struck him as really crazy: she
> looked almost exactly like like his girl form, down to the really
> long ponytails. Oh, sure, she looked a bit younger, but that didn't
> keep Ranma from wondering whether there could be some sort of
> connection between the girl and his curse. Maybe Jadeite was really
> after the other girl and it was a case of mistaken identity. Actually,
> that seemed like the most likely thing.
My, how logical.
His brain's higher functions are working overtime. In most anime
characters of this genre, it can be fatal. ^_^
> "My head hurts," Ranma muttered to himself, smoke literally
> billowing from his ears as his preciously rationed neurons battled it
> out between the desire to learn the need to bathe
learn, the
Fixed it.
"My head hurts," Ranma muttered to himself, smoke literally
billowing from his ears as his preciously rationed neurons battled it
out between the desire to learn, the need to bathe, the desperate
need to learn Haruka's ki attack, and wanting to know what the deal
was with "Sailor Moon." To make matters worse, his brain was also
engaged in coming up with the right training routine to improve his
speed and strength to go along with all that.
Unless you mean he hasn't learned to bathe yet. :)
That would be a rather uncomfortable fact to see, wouldn't it? ^_^
"EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEW, RANMA!!!"
> However, the creak of the window swinging open did attract his
> attention. Ranma looked in the direction of the sound. His eyes went
> wide and he slipped, falling onto his back. He inched toward the
> wall, his lips curling in horror when he identified the creature he
> saw, which clawed its way in through the forced window.
Hmm. Luna. perhaps?
Since this is the rough draft and I've precious little experience with
Ryouga, I'll need to strengthen his place in this.
Plus, I need to decide what kind of curse he's got. Oh, sure, it
LOOKS simple and straightforward enough, but is a simple
and straightforward curse like this really that entertaining?
I mean, there's nothing particularly fun about Spring of Drowned
Banana Slug, though some have suggested it for revengefics,
it wouldn't make for very entertaining revengefics (unless it were
someone I REALLY disliked ^_-).
But, at present, Ryouga's curse is still up in the air. We can
make it Luna, we can make it Artemis, we can make it Diana.
We can make a composite one--I just can't decide!
I'd made a weird decision once, but it just doesn't seem to
be very entertaining either.
> "Haruka, two; Setsuna, zero," Rei kept score.
>
> Setsuna smiled in spite of herself. "Very well. You have won.
> But tomorrow is another day."
At least, so far. :)
Ahh, Setsuna's vulnerable side! ^_^
> TO DIE!!!"
>
> "No!" the boy choked back the tears, too horrified to do
> anything but push his way further back against the wall.
>
> "BECAUSE OF _YOU_," the fanged monster advanced, stalking its
> way forward, step by step, inch by inch, closer and closer, "I HAVE
> SEEN *HELLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!*"
Heh. This I did not see coming, though I truly wonder if it's Ryouga or
another substitue
It's Ryouga all right. There are no proper SM replacements.
I mean, there's Umino or one of the Star Lights, but none really have
the right flair for this sort of thing. Not that it matters if the shoe fits
or not, mind ye. ^_^
> The eldest sister did not respond. Rather, she was gazing
> intently at the cat. Its fur was so black that it was blue and it had
> an almost anthropomorphic hint
extra space
Hmm... It's not in my copy, but then again, AOL does weird things
with messages. It also chops out huge chunks of "<>" inner debate
in NETTG...
> Genma blinked and rubbed her groggy little-big eyes. "Oh, it's
> a cat. Ranma's afraid of cats."
>
> Haruka frowned. "Why?"
>
> Ranma's father yawned. "I really don't know why. Cats are cute,
> harmless little things. Not like," she looked a little scared when
> she said, "horrible, scary, demonic, snaggle-toothed s-s-squirrels."
Amen.
Nothing's scarier than a squirrel comin' in to greet'cha in the morning!
> *Mreow!* "Ow!" The black cat bit Rei's finger, causing more
> surprise than damage, allowing room for it to land on the floor.
>
> "Catch that cat!" Setsuna ordered, pointing a finger at the
> fleeing feline.
Oh? Does she suspect something even after the explanation?
Even if she doesn't, she's gotta keep up the act! ^_-
> Rei and Haruka scrambled after the cat which leapt around the
> room, somehow avoiding the quick, well-trained hands grasping after
> it.
Cats are like that.
Yup. Rather slippery things, actually.
> *SPLASH!* Haruka plunged into the full furo, becoming instantly
> drenched. She accidentally tried to draw a gasping breath, but her
> throat filled with water. She sat up in the bath, coughing violently.
Cat: 2. Tendos: 0
^_^
Setsuna should be happy.
I'm certain she is. ^_^
> "Haruka, your training has obviously 'slipped,'" the woman with
> very long green hair added, her expression becoming perfectly neutral
> as she rested the end of her bo-staff on the floor.
>
> Haruka stood, her fist clenched close to her face as water
> trickled off her hair and down her clothes. After a moment, she
> relaxed. "Okay, score one for you."
There we go.
Can't be a complete loss for Setsuna, now, can it? ^_^
> "Aaah!" Soun was startled, not having seen his friend. He
> looked down at her. "Oh! Saotome-chan, er... SAN,"
Heh. Amusing.
Considering he's a man that's been raising his three daughters by
himself for the past few years, finding another (apparent) young
girl nearby is bound to bring up some... odd fathering instincts
now and again. ^_^
Not all the time, mind you, but just during critical moments and
when he doesn't have time to think about it.
> Setsuna returned after a moment with a little dress on a
> hanger. The outfit consisted of a small white blouse with a red bow
> on the front and a blue pleated skirt that would go to just about
> knee length on Genma. "It used to be Rei's when she was little,"
> she said, demonstrating it to the intended wearer. "It is not a
> White Dove Academy uniform,
Not familiar with the place. Made up or is it from something?
It's from a semi-obscure anime called "Nurse Angel Ririka."
The only ones I know that have seen it are Jussi Nikander and
Louis-Philippe Giroux.
And, unfortunately, both got too busy to help me integrate that
plot into the story, so I had to substitute a more commonly-known
series later on.
> After Serenity had been dealt with, then they could move on
> to the bigger targets like Microsoft and Jerry Springer. Their
> empires would be far more difficult to topple.
True.
I'll have to expand on this later, but the mention suffices for now.
> The man took a deep breath. "I am explaining this so that
> there will be no surprise when my plans do not include facing
> the Princess directly; we simply would not make it past her
> personal guard," he said, pointedly fingering the bandage on his
> wrist. "We require more energy."
Or could pick off the guards one by one.
Brains slower than 8088 chip processors... I'm sure they'll think
about it, but in the meantime... ^_^
Beryl laughed a short evil queen's laugh. "I understand. What
> are your plans?"
Jadeite: A bomb planted in their house while they're out. Set if off when
they return.
Beryl: Simple.
Jadeite: The more complex the plan, the more likely it's doomed to failure.
Never underestimate sneaky and simple.
"Never underestimate da power of da SHWARTZ!"
That's a very nice idea. Have to assign a youma to follow them home,
stake them out, and leave explosives, etc...
But... we can't have them WIN just yet, can we? ^_^
Interesting little thing. As you said, it's a set up chapter. Will get to
the next part soon.
Thank you very much! I'm sure the chapter'll get spruced up enough to
be passable and have a recognizable sequence of events later...
And, yes, setup. I think things could have been set up better, but
that's how they came out...
Revise, revise, revise. That's the way we go! ^_^
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