Lawrence Chu wrote:

I, Koshi Rikudo, hereby allow Excel Saga to become a really badly
written game fusion improspamfic chibi-thing.

Brief, but that will work.

It was a bright and happy and sunny spring morning!  And everyone was
happy because it was graduation!  And the author used way too many
exclamation points in his opening sentences!

And opened with the old weather cliche. But since it's Excel, it's okay. :)

  But enough of that.

Excel Denton, new graduate of the Spector

Spector or Special?

It might not have been the catchiest song, but Excel didn't care.  It
was all she needed, and it was the most beautiful thing she could think
of.  The job might not pay well, and she might die, but who cared?  The
man who interviewed her was HOT!

Yes, this is all quite familiar, except from the fact it's not ACROSS she's
spelling.

DEUS EXCEL
by Lawrence Chu
loosely based on situations by Warren Spector/ION Storm/EIDOS
     Interactive

Ah. so it was Spector. Not familir with the game it's based on though.

characters are property of Koshi Rikudo.
All rights reserved.  Don't sue, I'm broke.  Don't try to indict me on
     any drug busts, either,

Like the Dragon Half crew. :)

The ship docked out on the Southern End

Don't think it needs to be capitalized.

*thud*

"AAH!" XL screamed, flapping her arms like a chicken on crack.  "My
contact's dead!  What am I going to--"

It shan't last.

"My HMO doesn't cover treating scalpel wounds to the gut, so I guess
I'll just kick off," said the trooper before he died.

Practical.

Within minutes, Lady Liberty was a pile of rubble, which SHOULD have
been expected.

Oops.

                                *LOADING*

"Rifleriflegimmetherifle!" XL demanded, because the author had the
ability to change these things.

She is making quite the many fatal mistakes early, though.

While this was going on, a man was busy planning his escape in the
basement of the Statue of Liberty, when the sole door to his cell
opened.

"Give it up, Nabeshin," the man said as he walked into the light.

Nabehin looked up and gasped.  "It's YOU!"

YOU! looked back at Nabeshin

Heh. Now that one is classic.

Oops.

EPISODE 1: I LOOKED DEATH IN THE EYE AND SCREAMED LIKE A WUSS
TODAY'S EXPERMENT........FAILED.

It was okay. Nice idea, though I think you could have done more with it,
though what eludes me at this time. Still, an enjoyable read

D.B. Sommer



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