Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Sat, 13 Jul 2002 14:33:22 -0700 (PDT) Thryth <thrythlind@yahoo.com>
wrote:
Kasumi yawned and {streched : stretched} awake, trying to place
where the light tapping noise was coming from. She
glanced around for a minute or two before realizing
that it was coming from her door. More than a little
curious, she stood up and made herself presentable
before walking to the door and looking through the
peephole.
"Oh, come on," Ranma said. "Right now I can still
beat you with swords." By which he meant "{how : How} can you
teach me if you can't humiliate me{: ?}" but this time
Ranma wasn't neglecting speaking words {on : by} accident.
Nope, this time Ranma would rather receive pain via
random heavy objects than admit that Akane was going
to be spending any time humiliating him. Well, almost
willing, Ranma was running ahead as he spoke.
The pig-tailed boy was turning back to stick his
tongue out at her in {mid air : midair : mid-air} when he suddenly stopped
and flipped back to the ground landing at nearly the
same time as another young man settled {into : to} the ground
holding a bamboo umbrella.
Ranma backflipped away as the ground around the
second young man {vaporized : exploded} into a crater.
"You're {familiar but, : familiar, but...}" Ranma said, shrugging.
"What?" Akane asked. "You can't drown?" She only
knew one other person that {fit :} could also claim it was
impossible for them to drown.
"Enough {talking time : talking. Time} to fight!" Ryouga shouted.
"I got her," Ranma said {insistantly : insistently}, gently probing
her skull around the cut on her head and breathing a
sigh of relief to find that her skull was not cracked.
{ :}"She should be fine. Let's get her to that doc to be
sure."
{:"She's : "She's} going to be fine," Dr. Tofu said. "Just a
small bump on the head. What happened anyway."
"Then how can you expect Ranma to control his
{enemiies : enemies}' actions?" Dr. Tofu asked. Akane opened her
mouth and then acquired a perplexed look before
deflating and considering the question.
"What? Where?" Tarre asked as she looked around.
"{Onechan : Oneechan}, Dr Tofu, what happened?"
"Oh, {dad : Dad}," Akane said. "I thought you had to go to a
city council meeting. This is great! You'll be able
to have dinner after all. Nabiki already left for a
study group, and Tarre said she was feeling like she
couldn't eat so..."
"It is quite," Tarre searched for words.
"{Undescribeable : Indescribable} without the selection of swear words
available in the goblin language."
"You should have gone out with us, Saotome," Kasumi
said to the seemingly insensate Ranma and Genma. She
didn't make it clear {wheteer : whether} she was talking to a
specific Saotome or not.
"Yeah," Ranma said. "From our old school." Ranma
explained the bread {fued : feud} to the assorted girls,
receiving a collection of assorted {: puzzled : confused} looks.
"Sounds like the straws {the : that} broke the camel's back,"
Akane said dryly.
That's normally "straw", but with Ranma "straws" is probably correct.
Since Akane's already got a grudge of her own against Ryouga, it should be
interesting when P-Chan shows up.
"If you want," Ranma said. "Now, that training." He
smiled {evily : evilly}.
They both went back to their shogi game, listening to
the sound of a Akane demanding that Ranma let her
stand all the way up before pushing her down.
I guess he'll move on to falling from multi-story buildings later.