Cute Kitsune Kaydee wrote:

Disclaimer : They're not mine so please don't sue me. This story is set
right after the color Graphic Novel "Kings Of The Broken Wheel" because
that's the last one I read. If there are any more after that please inform
me.

Ranma Shows Up

Short

Prolog

An Elf-Quest Ranma 1/2 Crossover

By Cute Kitsune Kaydee

It was a normal day in the forest. Skywise had gotten up , did whatever he
does to get ready for the day , and went outside. 

Betraying that the author doesn't know what its talking about doesn't build
confidence in the reader.  If you are going to mention what Skywise does to
get ready in the morning, then figure out what those things are.  Otherwise
don't mention it.  

He had went for a walk in

an old part of the forest. He came across an old part of the High One's
magic. This magic just seemed to be sitting there doing nothing. He knew
better than to go near it. Terrible things could happen from the old
leftover magic. Just look at Madcoil for example there.

Suddenly the magic flared. He leapt back and wondered if he should get help.
The magic grew brighter and then faded away. A hole in the sky opened and
some people dropped through. Then the hole disappeared from his sight. He
hid and then looked at the people who had fell through.

They appeared to be human and one strange bear-like creature thing. The
bear-thing help up a wooden sign - (Where did that come from) , thought
Skywise - that said , "This is all your fault boy. You should not have made
the Master mad. Then he would not have cast that spell at us.".

Skywise is illiterate. 

A boy in a red colored shirt looked at the bear-thing and said , "My Fault!
Why the heck is it my fault!? He's the one who was groping Kasumi! Of course
I stopped him from doing. Would you rather I let him continue molesting
her?".

Before the bear-thing could answer another man with some hair above his
upper lip looked at them both and said , "Are you telling that he should
have let him Saotome?".

The bear-thing or Saotome thought about that for a few seconds and then help

Held.  

up a sign that said , "Of course not Tendo. Of course not. No need to get
angry.".

A purple haired girl glomped onto the boy and said , "Where are we Ranma.

Comma after "we".

This not look like Dojo.".

The boy said , "How should I know Shampoo. What do I look like , a
map-maker. And let go of me.".

Another boy in a yellow shirt said , "Ranma , how dare you hold onto Shampoo
when you have a perfectly good woman like Akane.".

Probably could use a question mark.  

The boy or Ranma said , "You've got to be kidding Ryoga. Me and that Tomboy
, ugh. Besides Shampoo grabbed onto me."

The other boy or Ryoga yelled , "How dare you insult Akane like that.
Prepare to die.".

If he's yelling, where are the exclamation points?  

Ranma said , "Bring it on anytime pig-boy.".

(Pig-boy?) , thought Skywise. He decided to get help. {Cutter} , he Sent ,
{There is something very odd down here. You had better come see this for
yourself. Humans have fallen out of the sky. And they appear ready to fight
one another.}.

Cutter:  And I should care about humans fighting each other...why?

- To Be Continued Or Not

That's a minor problem with this idea.  You've plopped a chunk of the Ranma 
cast down in Elfquest, but do you have any idea what to do with them?  
You need a plot.


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