As for the story itself, it's yet another 'Ranma gets fed up and

buggers

off' story.  Bleah.

Oyh. I give you a prologue, and you think I summerized the entire

fict...

He did go "Ahw fuck it!" go to "bugger off" and move in with setsuna, he
just found something worthwhile that is not part of his standard life.

The problem with most fics like this is not the ultimate goal, but the
transition from the canonical Ranmaverse to the fic.  It's just way too
abrupt, considering that canonical Ranma seems to prefer the status quo.
Why is Ranma now thinking this way?

It will show a slower transition. He didn't get up and say "fuck you
Nerima!!!!" like he does in most ficts, he just made a non-standard choice
that will lead him away from the normal situation. Remember these things in
refrence:

#1) He's 19 in this, it take place between three years after he arived in
Nermia, enough for his opinion of the situation to change.

#2) He's upset. No one remembered his birthday, and it made him even more
depressed.

#3) He's kinda drunk. Enough to remove some inabitions.

#4) Ranma's a TOTAL sucker for people that are actually NICE to him.

I don't know where you plan to take this, but having a hackneyed opening
that repeats the same mistakes as almost every other fic of its ilk does

not

seem very auspicious to me.

Any sugestions? : \

- Sama


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