Subject: [FFML] Re: [fanfic][Ranma][dark]Divided I Stand: Part IV
From: Bira
Date: 6/22/2002, 3:59 PM
To: FFML



      "Oh, that's Ranma Saotome. My youngest daughter,
Akane's fiance," Soun said sounding proud.


Comma needed after 'said'.

Also, I think either a comma should be added after "Akane's", or the
comma before "daughter" should be removed. As it is now, it looks like
Soun is saying _Ranma_ is his youngest daughter, besides being Akanes
fianc�.

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