Subject: [FFML] Re: [fanfic][Ranma][dark]Divided I Stand: Part IV |
From: Bira |
Date: 6/22/2002, 3:59 PM |
To: FFML |
"Oh, that's Ranma Saotome. My youngest daughter, Akane's fiance," Soun said sounding proud.Comma needed after 'said'.
Also, I think either a comma should be added after "Akane's", or the comma before "daughter" should be removed. As it is now, it looks like Soun is saying _Ranma_ is his youngest daughter, besides being Akanes fianc�.-- Bira -- homem sa�do das entranhas da Terra para mudar o destino da humanidade, usando apenas um filhote de urubu e um rolo de "silver tape"... http://www.shadowlandbr.hpg.com.br .---Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List----. | Administrators - ffml-admins@anifics.com | | Unsubscribing - ffml-request@anifics.com | | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | `---- http://ffml.anifics.com/faq.txt -----'