--- Jim Miller <whonk@xinu.nu> wrote:

Chapter Four: You Can't Change The Colour Of Your
Destiny

Commonwealth spelling of Colo(u)r.

I'm Australian.  According to my third-grade teacher,
that is the correct spelling, and all the Americans
have been getting it wrong for years.

	Here, in the serenity of the temple, she thought

that

becoming a permanent shrine maiden, as Rei-san

Since you were using kunoichi before, you might as
well use miko for shrine
maiden, too. :-)

I used 'kunoichi' before because there's no English
equivalent.  I have a loathing of any and all
unnecessary Japanese words/phrases in fanfic, so if
there's a corresponding English word I'll use it in
preference.

	As Nadeshiko turned to the next painting, she
couldn't help feeling there was some significance

here

- something she was missing.  She turned to the

next

image, this one of a woman sitting in a cave with

She's turning to the next painting/image twice.

Good point.  Thank you; I'll fix it.
 

Interesting story, I'm curious to see where it goes
next.

Thank you very much! I hope you will enjoy it.

Best wishes,
Raye

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   - C-3PO (to R2-D2), 'Star Wars: Attack of the Clones'

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