Roehl,

I have to say thank you for writing a Princess Nine chapter in your
World Cup crossover.  I'd just finished watching Vol. 4 in marathon
fashion moments before checking my e-mail, and reading your story was
a welcome epilogue to the session.

Before I say anything more, I must compliment you on your heartfelt
adherence to the spirit of the show.  Your crossover could have turned
out overly gimmicky, but in this case, the concept works well.

My only significant complaint is formatting related.  There are no
tabs to mark new paragraphs, nor are there double carriage returns
(the accepted alternative to tabbing paragraphs).  I believe proper
formatting is essential to the enjoyment of reading; certainly, if it
is work to read a story, a reader's mind cannot properly focus on what
you want them to.  Any collection of the World Cup crossover stories
should be reformatted with either five spaces at the start of each
paragraph (a good ASCII-compliant replacement for a tab) or a double
carriage return.  In my eyes, this is absolutely essential.

The dialogue was faithful to the Princess Nine personalities.  Thank
you for making the obligatory "cheesy" moments palatable; though in
sports anime, it is impossible to avoid cheese.  I must say, you
embrace the fromage well.

All in all, this has been my favorite of your World Cup crossovers. 
They are a welcome diversion: light on depth and content, but faithful
and enthusiastic in their implementation.  You are to be commended for
your truly original idea, and the way you've brought it to the page.



--Matthew Johnston

"Long Live Mao, Chairman of Home Plate!"

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