There's a problem here besides the fact that the legal age of adults is 20
in Japan.  The social idea of it is also 20... the "seijinshiki"

graduation

into adulthood ceremony takes place on that national holiday every year...
girls get kimonos just for the occasion.  Beyond that... Nodoka isn't

really

so far off from the real thing.  Japanese parenting believes in BS like
amaeru (dependence) and eternal obedience (which does usually happen, but
lasts often until the 30s).  In a country where the average age of it's
parliment members, business, etc. ledaers is 65... often they age around
60-80... how can you expect anyone to take 18 serious?

Did not know that... I'll edit it a bit, but it is close enough to
correct...

Tendo dojo?  This makes more sense, to me, but I'm not completely sure.

Tendo

home wouldn't be capitalized, after all, so I'm not sure that Tendo dojo

would

be, unless it was the actual name of the place.  I don't think there's a

sign

there that says 'Tendo Dojo', though.  More likely any such sign would

say

something along the lines of the type of martial arts taught at the

place.

Yes there is.  It's written in Kanji on a plaque on the front gate.  Tendo
Dojo is the formal name for the location that Tendo-ryu Musabetsu kakuto

is

taught at.... what else would it be called?  Taikukan?

Great, now I have to recapitolize all those 'D's ;p

Or you can just say he turned green and a trip to the toilet sounded good
right about then...

It's staying as is... I think it is the perfect expression fo the subject!
^_^

Legal smoking age is 20 like drinking and voting.  I don't think he'd try
it.

Just another sign of how the mighty have started to fall... ^_^

So, while I do think you should have something there, it shouldn't be

that

sentance.  Instead, change it to something else with the same meaning.

Just r

ephrase it somehow.

Oh?  "Hotaru has been taking a ride on someone's wild baloney pony and
unfortunately (not to Nodoka!) the semen diembarked and made it to

shore...

O.o'

That's freckin' funny but I doubt she's THAT far gone...

I was under the impression that they are STILL at home as they had been

duri

ng the earlier argument with Hotaru.  So anywhere outside of the bathroom,
toilet, kitchen and bedroom would have plenty  of chairs..like the living
room or dinning room.

They are in the living room...

I agree... the dialog is not so hot here... and ... the whole bathroom
dialog and bed dialog between Ranma and Hotaru in chapter 5...that isn't

so

hot either.  Actually it came off as fanboy obsession ... basically your
romantic/ "lovey dovey" lines aren't so good.

I know that aline ain't the best, any recomendations?

Ok, explain how the 'lovey dovey' lines are not the best. Remember, one of
them is mister "romanitcally a rock" Saotome Ranma...

Agreed... people may be stupid enough to not learn, but you'd have to be
brain damaged to forget that you were just wailing about how you caused

all

that drama and what the result was... no... she'd still be lamenting that,
which would temper her response to being pregnant.

She's projecting her anger... I know too many people who do this. : \

True.  i agree.  I thought the idea was to be waited upon hand and foot by
the daughter-in-law, play shogi with Soun and have Ranma teach martial

arts.

and you think the idea of massive amounts for major tornies never crossed
his mind? : \

Besides, Ranma past enrolement in acouple of major torniments will come up
later... (other series cameos)

Or "style"

That works ^_^

Thanks for your commentary.

- PsychoSama


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