Ooooookay.
Don't know a lot about Golden Boy (apart from what I learned in, ahem, a
little story called "Process of Elimination -- you may have heard of it),
so I can't comment on the GB background to this. Apart from that ...
What can I say? Looks like the start of another lunatic ride. Looking
forward to it. :)
A couple of minor typos that jumped out at me as I read:
Motoko lay on
her stomach, with Ranma laying atop her on her back, one leg folded
carefully up as though to catch something
Very common mistake. Unless Ranma was producing eggs, she was "lying,"
not "laying." (On the other hand, "lay" is correct for Motoko.)
"Uh, you're athsmatic?" he asked, fidgeting nervously with the pages
of his notebook.
asthmatic?"
Cheers,
Angus