On Wed, 15 May 2002 21:49:13 -0400
"Randy Grant" <dendarin@hotmail.com> wrote:
Hi, I'm new here and just unlurking. Here, submitted for your approval
(all C&C sans flames welcome) is all of my fic "Revolt" so far which I began
before I joined the list. Admittedly, it is pretty long like this, but my
chapters are pretty short, so it shouldn't be too bad. I am also requesting
prereaders for both this and a "Sailor Moon" series. Potential prereaders
please reply privately to dendarin@hotmail.com.
There's a problem with chapter 3, I think. You see, Luna Inverse is the
only entity in the whole world whom Lina Inverse truly fears, which
means she can literally lay the holy smackdown on her little sister.
Xelloss shouldn't be able to do that kind of thing to her, and she
definitely shouldn't be hiding in a roadside ditch when encountering a
mere two Mazoku (the lowly demon thugs serving them don't even count).
Besides, if Xelloss can dominate people that easily, why didn't he do it
to Lina and her companions in the first place?