Interesting idea, but not _nearly_ wacky enough for Police Squad.  Frank
Drebin's character is to reply to the literal meaning of the words spoken to
him, so he's kind of an unintentional straight man, with everyone else
playing the comedian.  He's also like Mihoshi, in that he causes chaos
without really even noticing.  When he does notice, his bumbling attempts to
put things right again always result in further pandemonium.  That's an
element which is sorely missing from this story.  Here, Captain Drebbin is a
competent character with a personality quirk that leans towards using
excessive force to accomplish simple tasks.  That's okay, but it falls well
below the level of insanity that made Police Squad what it was.

    I have full confidence in your ability to write that kind of story, if
you choose.  This note is just my way of encouraging it.  I truly believe
that you'll have a better, funnier story if you do.

   Ja mata,
   Larry F

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