----- Original Message -----
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, May 11, 2002 12:40 AM
Subject: [FFML] [fanfic][TM!] Galaxy Police Squad File 1: Bad Cop, Bad Cop

Err... I didn't actually READ this fic, I just looked at Michael Chase's
comments on it, and this part really stood out, so I thought I'd comment.

Kiyone, who had her firearm halfway drawn out, slowly placed it back in the
holster. Once convinced there would be no further shootinh, she poked her
head in. Seeing only the captain present at his desk, she hesitantly
entered. Mihoshi took the opposite tact and entered immediately and without
a hint of fear. Unwilling to be upstaged by her partner, Kiyone entered with
her back straight and jaw thrust out, as though she hadn't been almost hit
by the blast.

Both she and Mihoshi entered the office and gave a crisp salute. "Captain
Drebbin. Officers Makabi and Kiramitsu reporting for special assignment.

Okay, unless I'm reading this wrong, a sequence of events:

Kiyone hesitently enters.
Mihoshi enters bravely.
Kiyone enters again, stiffly this time.
Kiyone and Mihoshi enter again, together, formally.

Why so many times?  o_O;


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