Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Thu, 09 May 2002 10:55:03 +0000 R E <ranma_e@hotmail.com> wrote:
Here, slightly early (ahem :) is chapter five of Ten. Every time, I tell
myself I will finish the next chapter more quickly than the last, and every
time it ends up taking me just as long.
Oh, well. I'll try to finish the next chapter more quickly. ;)
Where have we heard that before? :}b
The pair drifted between the pools, trading blows with blinding speed.
Garyoutensei sent flames flying in all directions with each strike, flames
that burned hot enough to ignite the rock floor. Back and forth the two
combatants weaved, locked in an impasse. Blow met counter-blow, swing met
parry, offense met defense.
Damn it, she thought, this guy is good.
This makes more sense to me if I assume it is from Akane's point of view,
but it isn't clear that that is true since the scene seems to be writen in
the third person.
"Goodbye, Mother."
It seemed like Ranma was quite a bit older that she appeared since she was
apparently around when Akane's mother died, but this sounds like she's been
around much longer. Until a few paragraphs down, I didn't see any
indication that Ranma was hundreds of years old, just much older than
Akane.
The year or even century that the main action is taking place in has always
seemed ambiguous to me. I don't recall any mention of trains or cars or
similar 20th or 21st Century things, but no mention of anything that would
place things in an earlier age with any certainty either. I suppose it
could even be in a post-apocolapse period.
"Come with me, Akane. I want to help you."
I'm from the government. I'm here to help you,..
"You saw that?" Ranma asked softly, her voice heavy with dejection as it
tumbled down into the chasm. She looked away from Akane, down into the
abyss. Her voice grew tiny, its tone sad. "I'm not a demon."
I'm a devil.
"If I knew, I'd tell you," Ranma replied with a shrug. "All of the Hidari
I've come across have been boys."
Unless she forgets her nightmares, she remembers being a boy. So she's
still not telling Akane everything.