In a message dated 5/8/2002 9:41:27 AM US Mountain Standard Time, 
sommer@3rdm.net writes:

Bah. Now I must finally comment on these as well:

Don't think of it as a responsibility... think of it as an adventure! ^_-

 >     "You're welcome," Molly breathed in a relieved, exhausted
 > voice, in a slightly sarcastic-yet-serious manner only achieved by
 > such great actors as Scott Bakula while she fell flat on her back.
 
 Heh

I like Scott Bacula. Sure, he can be a bit annoying sometimes, but he's
got tons of experience!

 >     Al touched a few buttons on the hand-link device, moving
 > nearer to Doctor Beckett. His expression mirrored the surprise
 > Nephrite was going through. "Sam! This is amazing! You're not
 > gonna believe this!"
 > 
 >     "At this point," Sam replied in a soft, exhausted voice, "I'd
 > be willing to believe practically anything."
 
 Ditto

Everyone invited to do a small part in NETTG usually ends up that way. ^_-

 >     "This is what you came here to do!" Al announced, gesturing
 > toward the data coming through on his hand-link. "You weren't just
 > here to save the guy's life! You came to reunite him with his
 > familiy and remind him who his daughter is!"
 
 Yep. Typical QL plot. :)

I thought it appropriate, given the subject matter.

If we were going to take the time to save a random, worthless villain, who
was killed off in the original and for which there was much rejoicing, we 
might
as well involve the QL cast, who are only too happy to save random, worthless
people for no readily apparent reason. ^_^

Besides, the idea occurred to me a few years back, and I thought I might as
well capitalize on it. Wouldn't be proper otherwise! :P

You wouldn't believe the things my prereaders and I came up with for some of
the future "plot" of NETTG. If I were to mystically get tired and just decide 
to
tell the whole plotline without actually having to sketch out the full 
journey, it
would still take about 30-60k to explain.

I've even got small arcs involving an alternate reversal-style universe or 
two, but
that explanation can come later.

 >     "Nephrite's love for Molly is healing him!" Serena awed.
 
 Hey, it's Sailor Moon. That's how things work here.

It's in genre. I just didn't have a chance to get to it in the first rough 
draft.
Actually, there's a lot of stuff I want to dump in before I can call 10-2 done
and get on to 11.

...

And you still haven't told me what would make Amy's trippy visit to Venus more
enjoyable for you. ;-)

And there's a lot more stuff in the category of Ranma and Setsuna's visit
to Disneyland, ca. 3000 A.D. All I could come up with was this:

^_^

    For no readily apparent reason, Setsuna ran her index finger
down Ranma's forehead to the tip of his nose, reciting a poem.

    "One sunny morning in the middle of the night,
    Two dead boys began to make a fight,
    Back to back, they faced each other,
    Through their souls, they fought another.
    A deaf policeman heard the noise,
    Then came and shot those two dead boys,
    If you don't believe this lie is true,
    Ask the blind man,
    He saw it too."

    Ranma backed off nervously. Well, backed off would be too
strong a word. He slid a couple of inches to the other side of the
Space Mountain rocket seat. "Err, Setsuna, what are you doing?"

    "Setting the mood, m'love," Sailor Pluto noted, wedging the
timestaff into the space to her left in preparation for the
acceleration they were about to experience.

    Ranma shifted uncomfortably in his seat, glancing ahead at
the blinking lights. "Uh, how fast did you say this thing goes
again?"

    Setsuna winked seductively at her fiance. "Get ready for
your high-gee training, Ranma. There's a reason this is the most
popular ride in the park.

    The pigtailed martial artist paled, remembering the horrific
experience concerning the Matterhorn Ride. "So, this is going to--"

    The green-haired woman put her finger on the young man's
lips. "Shh, prepare to Live the Magic!"

    The rockets fired up, the heavy metal turned on, and the
engaged couple went on the best gosh darn ride in all of the magical,
wonderful world of Disneyland, ca. 3000 A.D.

    An hour later, a puddle of mush named Ranma will have spilled
from the rocket cart, but we've got too many plotlines going on to
want to pay any attention to that lil' detail. Ciao!

^_-

If anyone has some suggestions for scene improvements, I'm all for it.

Since the Ranma/Setsuna ideal seems to be such a good one, I'd like
it to turn out as well as possible. Unfortunately, my information base
fails me, since (shocking though it may be) I've seen approximately...
(calculating the figures, adding the fractions) two full Ranma 1/2 episodes.
Plus, while website data is quite useful, it's not the same as the real
thing...

So, what better way to obtain experienced Ranma data and characterization
suggestions than on the FFML? I'll simply take the one that seems the most
properly absurd and use it to its fullest potential. ^_^

That's probably the reason why Going At It Like Rabbits!!! 3 is taking so 
long:
I have to guess and ask professional opinions every step along the way...
(Well, that and college is easier planned for than actually done...)

What eventually gets seen publicly is normally indistinguishable from the 
first
draft...

 >     In another moment, the hole punctured 
 
 might just be 'puncture'

Hmm...

    In another moment, the puncture in Nephrite's shoulder had
completely disappeared.

Yeah, it does look better that way.

 in Nephrite's shoulder
 > had completely disappeared.
 
 Largely in part becaue the shoulder had disappeared as well.

    And Neflyte disappears in a flurry of sparkles, the rag Molly had
tied around his shoulder dropping slowly to the ground, still
stained with the general's green ichor...

If we wanted to copy the original and write in present progressive,
that is...

    And Nephrite is disappearing into a bunch of sparkly things,
while he starts to boil the water and dump it onto the martial artist's
head, returning him to his proper form as a pygmie badger...

I should _really_ go to bed soon... ^_^;;;

 >     Pushing the spectacles up against the bridge of his nose with
 > one finger, he took in his surroundings. He stood in some sort of
 > control room overlooking what looked like a large submarine bay.
 > Only, the water was red and instead of a submarine, the head and
 > shoulders of a giant robot poked out of the liquid. The robot's
 > hand was raised out of the water with several broken cables
 > protrusing from its arm.
 
 Oh dear. This should be good. 

Protruding and...

Yes, if anyone's feeling up to it, try writing a QL/NGE thing where Dr. 
Beckett
leaps into Ikari Gendo... and you must include this line:

"Sam, Ziggy thinks you're here to reunite Ikare here with his estranged 
son..."

And everyone must start freaking out when they notice how nice their commander
is acting.

Now whatever happened to that guy who was writing Evangellydoughnut...?

 >     Skuld looked at her eldest sister. "No he wasn't! I've never
 > granted a wish to anyone who..." She paused as part of her mind found
 > the forgotten memory reel, dusted it off, gingerly hooked it up to
 > the projecter, and watched the old events unfold over a bag of
 > popcorn and a fizzy soda.
 
 Heh. Cute. Urd's doing as Goddess of the Past?

Possibly, or maybe she was just remembering in a creative way.

And if you've read the previous chapters, and due to their tremendous size,
I have no reason to think you have (^_-), this scene was actually copied and
tweaked from Chapter 7...

 >     "But you said I could wish for anything!" A.S.K. complained
 
 Skuld: Anything is a relative term.

A.S.K.: Relative to who?

Skuld: Jerry Springer!

A.S.K.(hisses and recoils in fear)

 > power up and take this jerk out!"
 > 
 >     "I called him a pansy!" Belldandy cried. "I feel terrible!"
 
 Heh. Typical Bell.

I briefly considered having her get angry and seek revenge for 'Tim's 
actions...

But then I saw a couple of anime episodes of OMG/AMS and said to myself,
"Nah, it's not her style..."

Besides, revenge has been done too much. It's funnier to have characters
apologize to each other and seek out the greater good. Nobody ever
expects THAT one nowadays, mwa-ha-ha-haaaa! =~.^=

And has anyone written an alternate NGE 'fic where Ikari Gendo is a pacifist
that dresses in bright and shiny colors and wears a lot of beads?

 Nice work.

Thank'yaverymuch! I'm glad to get a nice bit of commentary now and again.

 D.B. Sommer

Okay, we've got some comments, some positive response, and gentle, caring
words. Everyone's been nothing but supportive and helpful thus far. Thanks,
everyone!

...

Hey, wait a second, where'd all the flames go?! >_<;;;;;;;;;;;;;; "Grrr..."

^_^;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;

Kidding! Kidding!

We'll keep working on it over here. Thanks again, DB!

...

What DOES DB stand for anyway, Donald Buchannon? Debbie Blair? Defribulation
Barbeque? Eh, it doesn't really matter. See ya!

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