----- Original Message -----
From: "Brad Angell" <oddball22@hotmail.com>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, May 04, 2002 9:13 PM
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma][spamfic] Happily Married!

         Akane sobered at that thought. It had been a long time since
then. Against all odds, the girls and guys had gotten together and
decided not to fight anymore. They had more or less become tired of the
games and the chasing and the lying. They agreed to let people marry who
they wanted, and then go there seperate ways.

What lying?  Who was lying?  o_O;

'their seperate ways'  --not there.

        "Hi honey!" Akane greeted, then gestured to Shampoo. "Look who
showed up?"

Hi, honey!

showed up!'  --she's not asking a question.

        "Nihao!" Shampoo looked a little confused, but waved anyway.

         Akane's husband grunted something, then headed into the
kitchen.

        "Shampoo see that Akane likes her Airen's cursed form?" the
Amazon asked, noticed the glow on her former-rival's face.

I was so sure that this was Genma.  ^_^;

Akane I can understand, since she's *so* fond of P-chan, but I really don't
get why you thought Shampoo would like Mousse's duck form, when there's not
really any indication of that.  What might have been better would be to have
Shampoo find a nice tomcat to settle down with, having her cat-curse affect
her in human state as well as cat state.

Of course, then you couldn't have gone for the angle where the two former-guys
look at each other at the end like that.  ^_^

On a side note, Ranma could have ended up with Mousse's cursed form.  He was
awfully willing to go along with marrying duck-Akane, after all.  There might
have been a reason for that, ya know.  :)

         The Amazon blinked. "Akane's Airen do that to?"

that, too?

Eh... that's the end.  Heh.  I do have to say that the bit about Ranma was a
bit confusing--why was he brought up?  There was no reason to mention that
Ranma wouldn't like Akane marrying P-chan, if they had already agreed to go
their seperate ways.  Ranma probably wouldn't have liked Akane marrying
anybody other than him at all, but why would that be a consideration?  He's
not the one getting married.

Anyway, that just felt odd.  Changing it so that it was Ranma with Mousse and
Akane with Ryouga might have been more effective.  I can't really think of any
way that it would detract from the story, either.

*Tries to think of something else to say.*

Um... nope.  Mental blank, no more comments for you!


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