DB Sommer wrote:
Part 2:
"Be prepared for the mother of all headaches in the morning," Genoh
warned.
Heh. A bit late for that.
Genoh's kinda like that. ;)
"Shift in the current," Genoh said over the connection, somehow clearer
than it had been only a minute before. "Bad timing, but good luck, all
things considered. Welcome to subspace, Tatsuki-san. Have a look around."
He did. It looked like Cleveland. "I'm in hell!" Tatsuki wailed.
I've driven past Cleavland. It scared me.
"How? Jurai doesn't care to watch us, most often, Tatsuki-san. We're
scum, and ignoble porters. They're content to ignore us and pretend
we're a problem far removed from their world." He frowned across the
screen, and crossed his arms over his chest. "And I know what you're
asking -- why don't we stage a revolt, hmm?"
Well, the ships aren't that powerful from the sounds of things, and I doubt
they have that many people.
They have far more people than Yohito expected, at least. Hm. Maybe I
should make that more obvious.
"Good enough. We'll to it
do it
Got it.
Saryu-oh's request was met with approval, as the entire sail-structure
folded slightly, the interior bulging inwards and leaving it to resemble
a cone with hundreds of trailing Juraian -- no, Yohito corrected himself
-- Ginraii ships
Heh. Still hasn't been able to fully accept them yet.
Yep....
Washuu grinned as the gurgling of Ranma's stomach betrayed him. "Tsunami
made it for you,," she assured him.
"Oh," Ranma said, brightening instantly. "That's different.
actually you think he'd be cautious. He has no idea of her culinary skills.
He does remember Sasami's cooking, though. And it's GOT to be better than
MREs, in his mind. :p
"Just something Cologne asked to be done -- it's something that all
warriors are supposed to go through among her people.
Something about a battle orgy.
O_o?
She hung in that pleasant space between sleeping and wakefulness,
That all cats spent the majority of their lives in. Like the one that's
curled up in a ball in a chair across from me for the last three hours or
so.
Mine's on a roomate who is likewise sprawled across a nearby couch.
Pei-Lin clicked her tongue, pulling a silk handkerchief from her sash,
and dabbing at tears of frustration that Rei hadn't even realized she
shed. "What goes before stays before," she said gently. "Sometimes,
dream of Kura-Wan long ago -- when Pei-Lin was her lover and Kura-Wan
was man. Pei-Lin does not like man, likes Kura-Wan."
Heh. Interesting.
I had fun with those three.
Oh, wait, that sounds so wrong....
Pei-Lin straightened her head out and nodded. "Rei is a good girl," she
stated proudly. "Pei-Lin can not have child of her own, so for now, you
will be Pei-Lin's daughter, yes?"
That's a bit much, considering she only met Rei and isn't that much older.
Ah, typo. That should have been 'today', not 'now'.
"Hey, are you still carrying my handkerchief?" Ranma asked her.
Need a line break there, I think
Probably.
"What does that do?" he asked, frowning.
Ami: Kills reavers.
Yakumo: Works for me.
Heh.
"Not as well as it could, but far better than it might have," Ami said.
"The Galaxy Police and Marines that were sent there are working to keep
rioters in line, but it's not hard to imagine how upset all those people
are, after everything they've been through."
Give them a reaver to play with. They'll change their tune quickly.
Very likely.
"Setsuna?" Ami prompted. "What about her?"
Rei: Bitchy, same as always.
Hah!
Flinching, Rei's smirk faded into an expression apologetic worry. "Ah,"
she said quietly. "Then I guess it is the two of us. I'm sorry, Ami-chan."
Rei: Up for some hot lesbian sex?
Ami: Sure.
-_-
Herb's eyebrows rose, and he turned to regard Ami curiously. "Is that so?
Well, that's certainly interesting."
Queen of an entire planet. Delusional. He'd ditch her the first time an
opportunity presented itself.
Eh?
The room's stone floor sloped slightly, a shelf near the higher end
holding bathing gear. Shaking his head, he removed his robes and folded
them, carefully stowing them on the shelf. Ran-oh-ki hopped from his
shoulder as he removed his robes, then sat atop them, curling up and
dozing off.
Nice touch.
Ran-oh-ki was fun to write.
Ranma cracked one eye open, glancing to his left surreptitiously. As he
had almost expected, Tsunami was there, smiling at him sweetly, and
wearing absolutely nothing. Her body seemed to nearly glow in the
moonlight, sparkling drops of water outlining her even without his
vision being actively enhanced. His eye closed quickly. "Um, nothing,"
he mumbled. "What does this have to do with the ceremony, exactly?"
He's such a silly fool. You think he would be wary with her being naked as
well.
Yes....
Washuu spoke before Ranma could answer, "And for the second, if you would
prefer, we can go get Cologne instead, Ranma."
Ewww.
It stopped his questions about why they were there. :p
She couldn't place what it was about him that attracted her to him,
Probably that he was good looking unattached male, and there were few of
those around.
RandomGuy: Hi, I'm-- *Gets eaten by reaver*
Rei: Dang. I need a man who doesn't die every time a reaver attacks.
Herb: *cough*
"Oe Kintaro?" Ami asked, blinking at Yakumo in surprise. "But he's the
man on the Galaxy Police ship that I talked to about... um... about the
Ethos array."
He gets around.
Seems to be part of his nature.
"No!" Rei gasped, drawing in breath to shriek. "NO!"
Heh. Now another piece of the dream comes true.
Slowly.
Herb grabbed her, spinning her about in his arms, and swiftly clamping a
hand over her mouth while she attempted -- futilely -- to yell about the
complete and utter wrongness of it. How could that man be here? They had
changed the future! They had changed what Serenity had shown them, and
made it something else -- how could it still end that way?
Because if it's really fate, you can't change it.
That's a big if, though.
Once all of the attendees of the meeting were crowded in the abandoned
house that Setsuna had indicated, she scanned them all, and sighed. "I'm
not even going to ask who told you enough to know that I'd know about
that, Higurashi," she said, shaking her head and looking him in the eye.
"But I do want to know why you want to know."
Lot of 'know's in there. I'd change some.
Good suggestion.
"Perhaps," Saffron murmured. Ami focused her eyes on her computer screen,
apparently tuning out the rest of the people in the room. "I have no
interest in seeing this world destroyed -- I cannot leave it."
Hmm. Interesting. That means he stays no matter what.
Sucks to be him.
"No, that's not it," Ami said, shaking her head. "I... I'm the
administrator to the system. I can give myself access to it, it's
just... it's the only file on the entire system that I can't access
automatically."
That's bad.
Lots of things that are 'bad' seem to be cropping up. ;)
"I see," Setsuna said, clearly disturbed. "I remember none of this. What
does this have to do with Senshi Saturn?"
It's where the tainted one ended up.
Bingo!
"She... she received the dark mirrors for all of the other crystals," Ami
concluded, biting her lip. "Amatera's hope was that Senshi Saturn's
energies could be manipulated in such a manner that the taint was
physical instead of spiritual, resulting in senshi who wouldn't live
long enough for their full powers to manifest,
My, how grim.
A lot of their history looks that way. I blame Tokimi.
"That would be the clue, then," Ranma said, nodding. "I was told I
couldn't let her die on this planet. So I guess this means that if you
want to blow up the place because the reavers start to win more, or
something, Saffron, you're going to have to do it without her help."
True. Not like Saff was counting on her anyway.
Nice work.Things are moving into place for the final inevitable climax.
prose flowed well and quickly. DIdn't even find that many grammar mistakes.
Should get to the last few pieces in the next few days. Want to finish this
before moving on to something else.
Thank you again for the C&C, Mr. Sommer. Don't push yourself too hard on
my account, though. ^^
D.B. Sommer