Overall I enjoyed your story.  I thought the story moved fairly well.
One problem I did have is, as Thermopyle stated, The lack of the search
for a cure.  I think Ranma would have done every thing he could to fight
the cancer.  

The first reading I was not able to see what DB was talking about.  But
after reading his other email I can see where he is coming from.  The
problem is that while reading the manga and or watching the anime we
form our own views of the characters presented.  Even though we may all
view the same material everyone views the characters in a different
light.  I myself like Akane.  Now, if you ask Zen to do a character
sheet on Akane my guess is that it would vary from mine.

I can not think of one author who has no detractors.  So take what you
will of the C&C and incorporate it into your story, but if it strays to
far from your heart don't.

Another thing the story has done is spark my muse a little.  I too have
a story regarding Ranma and cancer that has been dormant for over a
year.  I now hope real life will loosen its hold and let me restart it
and some other backlogged stories soon.   I we need to go thought it and
reedit what small part I do have and de-emonize Ryoga.  But in my story
Ranma will fight back, the hard part make it be believable to the
Ranmaverse



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