My, if nothing else, things sure turned lively around here. ^_^ Since most
 of the parties directly involved have reached the inevitable impasse and
 want the issue to die off, we'll move on to more constructive work:

 No, Kich, I didn't forget you. Accidentily left of '.com' on an address,
which is why this is a resend.

 Used all grammar corrections.

And the last part:

$Right you are.

 Or at least half of it. :)

moment, made her feel significantly better. All the false pretenses had

lost
their strength and durability. They had been weakening for months, and
after
the terrible acts she had perpetrated today, all for her own desires, it
would have been deluded to try and ignore her feelings. She had finally
reached the borders of self-denial, and the walls had come tumbling down
allowing her to step beyond them and into the truth. Now she had to face
and
accept it, not matter how risky it was.

$I am a whore.  I have to accept myself as I am.

 Heh. I guess that's one way of looking at it.

around

him, the vines grew, climbing higher and rooting themselves deeper. They
were small growths, unnoticeable when one looked at them day to day, and
subtle, since even the vines didn't know what they were doing. They did
what
came naturally, just like Kazuki. It all had happened naturally.

$Okay, that little vine bit didn't work for me.

 It's not the best comparison, I agree. But I want to use one, that's what
 came to me, and I'm not very good at such things. Not sure what I would use
 instead.

wouldn't abandon the others when they needed his help, and she had been
right. She resented him for not choosing her desires above others'
needs,
and she loved him even more for being true to his own giving nature and
refusing to follow her selfish wishes. If he would never abandon his
friends, surely he would never abandon his lovers.

$Plural?  Heh.

 Well, more in the sense of lovers over his life rather than multiples at
any
 one time. :)

It was true. The lies were falling like dominos. She knew she tended to
act
shrewish, petty, and egocentric.

$Umm, I like that in a woman...

 Heh.

understood
what a repulsive creature Ayuko Sanada was. The bitch hadn't even acted
heartbroken. It was over morning breakfast she had simply declared to
her
husband and daughter, "I can't handle this anymore. I'm leaving." And
did so
without a backward glance.

$Indecisiveness is one thing you can't fault her for.

 This is true. She knows what she wants and is determined to get it.

fear that she would grow to be exactly like her. They said resemblance
was
only skin deep and that free will was everything, but what if it went
deeper
than that? She knew all the figures on abused children becoming abusive
parents. Children that grew up in broken homes tended to repeat those
mistakes themselves, no matter how often they swore they would never do
to
others what had been done to them.

$Who was it that said, 'Children who grow up in unhappy homes are 63%
more likely to grow up and write bad poetry?'

 Hmm. Stumped me with that one.

For the first time, Mitsuki wondered if she was worthy of Kazuki's love.
Setting Rara up was a mistake, one Mitsuki would have done anything to
take
back even if it meant something as drastic as taking her place on the
date.
Anything to make amends.

$Damn.  She rejected the dark side.  And another is lost to us...

 Yeah. This is much closer to WAFF. At least if you discount the attempted
 rape and such. :)

Within her grasp, Rara said softly out, "Is... Is anyone else here?"

"No, they're still gone. But I'm here for you. I'll take care of you, I
swear."

$Need some description to go along with that statement.  It seems too
dry as it is.

 Others mentioned that was well. How about:

 Mitsuki gently ran her fingers through Rara's disheveled auburn locks "No,
 they're still gone. But I'm here for you. I'll take care of you, I swear."

A fist slammed into Mitsuki's unsuspecting gut. Every breath she had
ever
taken was knocked out of her body. Her stomach seized up, as though it
was
going to spew the contents of every meal she had in the last week onto
the
floor. She doubled over in pain, gasping from the fire in her lungs,
trying
hard to get some air and wincing with every agonizing breath she took.

$Yay, Rara!  Kick her ass!

 She does that. It's always the quiet ones that are the most dangerous.
 Shinobu from Love Hina springs to mind. ^_^

 Miss Ra sneered again. She moved confidently, with a palpable swagger
to
her gait. "Yes, it is me. It's not shy Mitsuki Rara you're facing now,
you
contemptuous slug. Miss Ra is back, and you're going to pay for what you
did
to us."

$Oh, hell.  She's using the royal We again.  Those delusions of
grandeur are back.

 Miss Ra: No. We're using the MPD version of 'We'.

Miss Ra's voice dripped thick with an icy venom that made Mitsuki
flinch.
"That bastard, Sanosuke, had us pinned down in his little car and was
going
to rape us. Mitsuki couldn't deal with it, so she let me take over.

$Miles away, back at the lookout point, the strange, insommniac
squirrel chittered quietly to itself as it raked dirt in to cover the
hole it had just made.  Sanosuke's nuts may have been smaller than the
acorn, but at least they had been easier to get to, dangling from a
branch as they were.

 Grizzly. Amusing. But grizzly.

"Don't play games with me!" Miss Ra shouted, spittle flying from her
mouth.
"I'm not blind like Mitsuki is! I know you set us up! It was obvious
from
the beginning, but I couldn't make her see it! What did you and Sanosuke
arrange, huh, Mitsuki? Did you tell him I was an easy fuck? That I
always
spread my legs after dinner and a movie?"

$Sort of not exactly?

 Pretty much.

Miss Ra followed, bending low so she could shout right at Mitsuki's ear.
"What were you going to do?! Tell Kazuki I was damaged goods so he
wouldn't
want me and you could have him all to yourself?! Was that it? Or did you
think I'd enjoy being raped and I'd want more of it, or I'd just go out
of
my mind? Well, Mitsuki? Tell me!"

$Eh, but she did go out of her mind.

 Miss Ra: No, Mitsuki just went to another part of it while I took over.

More senses returned. She was laying flat. She opened her eyes, looking
up
at the familiar ceiling of her room. Underneath her was the soft
mattress of
her bed.

$Her bed?  I guess Rara didn't want blood on her own.

 Yes. Also the outfit has been changed to her standard Rara army one. As
 someone pointed out, if Miss Ra was wearing the sex kitten costume, that
 means she was intent on engaging in sexual play with  Mitsuki Sanada from
the outset, rather than it happening because of Kazuki's wish.

 Her arms were above her head, stretched out and sore. She tried to
sit up, but discovered her hands were tied at the wrists with something
soft
yet resilient, which was in turn tied to something secure. She could
rotate
her wrists slightly back and forth, but there was no hope of escape from
how
firmly they were bound. Her legs were spread-eagled as well. She tried
moving, but discovered they were just as tightly bound as her arms, here
she
could see some sort of leather restraints, one around each ankle and
tied to
a bed post.

$Heh.  I see that Mrs. Ikeuchi has done her door to door routine in
that neighborhood as well.

 Ayuko Rara: I always shop from her. It's how I keep my husband in line.

Despite her predicament, Mitsuki didn't feel panic. Everything seemed
hazy,
as though it was a dream and happening to someone else. It was almost
surreal, this feeling of helplessness. Her head was still sore from the
blow. She tried shaking it as best as she could. It hurt her neck, but
some
of the fog over her senses was lifted. The memory of what had happened
before she woke up like this filled her, and she left out a soft moan.

$She let out a soft moan as she realized what had happened to make her
wake up like this.

 More like, "What have I done?" kind of moan.

Or is it that?  That's one of those funky grammar issues I'm not sure
about.

"You're awake? Good."

$Rara grinned widely at her.  "Are we having a ball or what?"

 Hehehehe.

there

just halfway up the pelvis. Only the boots remained exactly the same,
with
slender heels that increased Miss Ra's height several centimeters,
adding to
her already domineering stance.

$Short heels.  I would have expected three or four inchers at the
least.

 Good point. Will increase size. The actual measurement for the heels were
on
 a page somewhere.

with his hands, placing them where no man had ever been allowed to touch

before. It made her want to retch merely thinking about it, and Rara had
actually suffered that bastard's slimy grasp, and all because she had
been
deceived by someone she trusted as a friend. Mitsuki deserved to share
in
the suffering she had caused. It was like when she had accidentally sent
Kazuki to the other world. She was not Ayuko. She would not avoid her
responsibilities. She would pay for what she had done, no matter what
nature
the currency Miss Ra wished to extract from her was.

$Even if she had to take out a loan!  Or does that carry the money
angle too far?

Prolly.

Involuntarily, Mitsuki's eyes followed the course of Miss Ra's breasts.
Even
now, rendered helpless for all the evil she had done, she was still
finding
herself turned on by her cousin's appearance. What a loathsome creature
she
was to have such base thoughts in such a situation.

$But, but, that's the point of the whole situation!

 Well, the reason I set things up this way, anyhow. :)

Miss Ra said, "Sanosuke's already paid for his role in this. He's not
in,
shall we say 'working condition', anymore, and not likely to be for some
time.

$Ah HAH!  Mitsuki Rara isn't really Mitsuki Sanada's counterpart at
all!  She's really the parallel world counterpart of...
Lorana Bobbit!

 Shudder.

 I'm satisfied that I've taken his pound of flesh from him.

$Oh, come on now.  There's no way he was well-hung enough for it to be
a pound of flesh she took.  Couple of ounces, tops.  Heh.  You should
have her make a few disparaging comments towards that end.

 Nah. That would be too over the top. Besides, she more interested in
Mitsuki
 S right now.

Trembling in fury, Miss Ra raised the crop above her head, intent on
bring

$Rod, actually, if I'm understanding the description correctly.

 Oops.

what you did, but I can't bring myself to hurt you, no matter what
happened.
It's too much like hurting myself, though it's deeper than that. I don't
pretend to understand what's making me feel this way, but I do."

Mitsuki said something through her gag. Miss Ra removed it.

$Yeah, that's easier said than done.

 Added to this as well.

Miss Ra moved her hand from Mitsuki' cheek and placed a finger against
lips,
silencing her. "I already did that when I didn't strike you. But if it
helps, I'll say it out loud. Yes, I forgive you."

$Mitsuki: Yay!  Can we make with the moohah-hoohah now?
Rara: Well, since you apologized...  Okay.

 Sadly, this isn't far from the truth.

"If you can't tell, I must not be doing it right." Miss Ra's hand began
to
massage the area more vigorously, eliciting a gasp from Mitsuki.

"You were at my throat a minute ago." Mitsuki sighed.

$Rara: You're not as sensitive up there.

 Heh. Nice one.

"Mitsuki and I." She shook her head at Mitsuki's confusion. "Don't be
surprised. Surely you suspected from our behavior that we're not exactly
a
whole person. I came about from all the training Mitsuki had to undergo
to
perform as 'Miss Ra.'

$I wish I had an alternate personality who could use my body to go to
work and let me sleep in.

 That was one of my wishes in high school as well.

 She wasn't really cut out for the rigorous
instruction, and some of the mental exercises were... difficult for her
to
manage.

$Today, in Desensitivity Training 201, we're going to be torturing a
puppy.

 Mitsuki Rara: Oh dear, time to let Miss Ra take over.

 Miss Ra: Let me use the filleting knife.

Miss Ra's hand went to Mitsuki's nipple again. The other hand she cupped
to
her ear and pointed it in the prone girl's direction. "What was that? It
sounded like you were dodging the question."

"I like it! It looks great!" Mitsuki blurted out.

$That's the kind of situation you really don't want to be in when the
girl asks that dreaded question.  "Slave, do I look fat in this
dominatrix outfit?"  You just can't win.

 Hehehehe.

Miss Ra laughed. Not with the venom of before, but a genuinely amused

After careful consideration, Miss Ra stood up. "Now that I think about
it,
you do need to pay for this morning. Imagine, coming out of nowhere and
feeling up your cousin like that.

$That's just wrong.

 This whole fic was. You should have realized it by this point.

Miss Ra gave a playful laugh. "Oh, Mitsuki, you are so painfully blind
in
some ways. Of course we enjoyed it. Why do you think we didn't protest?
Mitsuki might be passive, but she's not that passive."

$Heheh.

 Hey, she set Kazuki free and risked her mother's wrath rather than allow
 Ayuko to have him. She has some spine.

"We could barely keep our minds off it until you came up with that whole
foolish dating scheme."

$Mitsuki: Umm, did you accidently admit to tendancies of lesbianism in
the locker room, too?

 Miss Ra; Lunch room staff, as it turned out.

"Yes, Mitsuki just hides it better. But let's not worry about motives or
Kazuki at the moment. I think we have more important issues to resolve."
Miss Ra went to the desk and retrieved a small object that fit in the
palm
of her hand.

$I'm guessing it's not a palm pilot.

 Would be a bit of a downer at this point.

"We do?"

"Oh yes." Miss Ra held the object out, a small utility knife, and
extended
the blade. "It's called payback."

$When she said pound of flesh, she wasn't kidding, was she?

 Meant to intimidate, but the readers will know better.

Slowly, Miss Ra continued to approach. "I did for tonight. But as I
said,
you still have to pay for this morning." She stood above Mitsuki.

$Rara: After I ravage every hole you have, I'll make new ones and take
their virginity as well!  Bwahahaha!
Mitsuki: Eep!

 Ditto. You scare me. Even I wouldn't have come up with that one.

Whoops, my mail program just quit letting me add more characters.
Maximum size has been reached, so I split it in half.  Part two is on
it's way.

Blech. Only got four and a half hours sleep in two installements. And I'm
going to be busy by later this afternoon. Hopefully I'll get something done

 Thanks, as usual.

 D.B. Sommer

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