I've noticed that this scene needs to be straightened out:

  "Are you sure we need any hot water?" Ukyou asked

after a moment.
   "One fantasy at time," Akane said blushing.  "And
how would that prove you're a woman?"
   "Right Ukyou," said smirking nervously as he
reluctantly left to get his water. <<

It is difficult to discern who is saying what. A few words in the right
places should do the trick.


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