Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma1/2][OneShot]Replaced
From: sec@konatsu.dhs.org (Sean Connor)
Date: 4/3/2002, 10:56 PM
To: Tom Keehn
CC: ffml@anifics.com


On Tue, Apr 02, 2002 at 09:13:38PM -0600, Tom Keehn wrote:
None of this belongs to me and shouldn't be considered for use beyond 
entertainment purposes.  This was not meant to generate money and should not 
ever be used in that way.  If you run short on toilet paper, I suppose you 
can use this but I wouldn't recommend it.

I'm not exactly sure how you'd manage that, unless of course you printed it
out.  :)
 
 
Tsubasa clenched his fists at the thought of Ranma Saotome.  Ranma had 
tricked him into caring for him, had toyed with his emotions.  After so many 
rejections from Ukyou, he had acted upon a momentary weakness and paid for 
it dearly.  Tsubasa had let himself care about someone else, only to 
discover it was the same culprit that was trying to steal his Ukyou from 
him.

The entire encounter had not gone well and Tsubasa had fled Nerima, not 
wanting to return.  But here he was again despite his convictions.  Despite 
betraying Ukyou, Tsubasa was not about to give up on her.  If only Ranma 
hadn't been there to screw things up, Ukyou would have been his.

Good to see that you've explained his fixation on onna-Ranma.  However, also
remember that he was at least contemplating going after Akane at the end of
the story.


"Fine," he sighed.  "I'll have a pork and shrimp okonomiyake."  She nodded 

okonomiyaki

"I don't need your help," she grumbled.  "I dealt with Ranma and if he 
doesn't want to speak to me again, that's fine by me.  It's not like I'm the 
one leading people along and suddenly attempting to get married without 
personally letting my supposed 'best' friend know beforehand.  As far as I'm 
concerned, he's dead to me."

This is one of the more interesting characterizations of Ukyou I've seen. 
Unrepentent, but not falling into the 'psyco-bitch' cliche.  Good job.
 

"I'm Kunoichi Konatsu," the girl replied softly.  "Ukyou-sama has taken me 
in to be her waitress in exchange for room and board."

Actually, Kunoichi is a title, not a name.  We aren't actually given
Konatsu's given name.
 
Tsubasa turned and bolted out of the shop, fumbling with the door for only a 
moment.  He dashed down the streets, his sandaled feet slapping furiously 
against the pavement, with only one thought rambling over and over in his 
mind.

'My Ukyou has replaced me.'

The difference being, of course, that Ukyou actually seems to like
Konatsu...

Nice little shortfic, all in all. 

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