David Johnston worte:

Doubtless many of these things will have been caught by others, but
what the hell.

Nah. You'd be amazed at the number of small things a reader will miss (to
say nothing of the writer who wrote the piece)

was there that the bulk of the machinery resided. Soft hums and loud
throbbing noises could be felt permeating the air. It was like a giant
factory that had been lef
neck and traveling on her back. The quintet of heroes landed safely and
stood on the far side of the cavern, gazing at the machinery before

them.

Somebody did a little too much deleting.

Hmm. My copy has the words in it's entirety.

<excerpt>
resided. Soft hums and loud throbbing noises could be felt permeating the
air. It was like a giant factory that had been left to run on automatic.

lower and upper torso. A white 'M' and 'W' crossed over one another in

red

section of the upper body.

Geez, I don't remember Speed Demon looking like that at all.  More

importantly, what

does "in red section" mean?

Red section in the middle of his torso. And this teaches me to not look a
character's costume  over before writing about it. :(

The other newcomer, who had spoken earlier, was far more subdued. He >was
wore loose white pants and shirt, and had a vest and bracers made of

Delete "earlier".  It adds no meaning and gives an untrue impression that

it was more

than a second ago that he spoke.

Okay

Captain Japan smirked. "If my name was something as stupid as Pantyhose,

I'd

have been happy to call myself just about anything else. Even something

as

lame as 'The Dazzler'."

Iron Duck!

Even Howie only called himself that for a couple of issues.

Speaking of Howard, Finally got the HtD Kiss issues. And only a dollar a
piece, too.

For just a split second Thor was taken aback. Reflexively she was about

to

shout out she had no interest in perverts. Unfortunately that left her

open

The difference between Thor and the real Akane is that the real Akane

would

suddenly become invincible for a moment after that comment as she exacted
retribution.

Hehehehe. True.

was beneath her to deal with these underlings. She was Thor, scion of the
Realm Eternal. To her the leaders of armies fell.

Well...strickly speaking Odin was the one who kept offing the leaders of

armies.

She is being rather full of herself now. The few times she's led bands of
warriors and Odin isn't around, she did go after the leaders.

"Captain Japan, Leinderhosen Man." Captain Japan tried hitting Tarou with
the flat of the shield, but missed as the youth dodged out of the way

again.

Leiderhosen Man

So many spellings. I think people have given me four different ones. I ought
to check it out in a German dictionary.

"You do. I'm just toying with you." Tarou proved his point by throwing a
straight punch towards Captain Japan's face. His longer reach enabled him

to

I wouldn't say that proves his point so much as backs his claim.

True. Will rewrite.

At that moment, the shield, which had bounced off a nearby wall,

returned.

Tarou intercepted its flight with his back. The blow hurled him several

feet

away and stunned him badly enough that he didn't return to his feet
immediately.

The geometry doesn't work.  Assuming that he is facing Cap, Tarou is going

to

be knocked forward, not away.  A

Good point. I'll now have it hit him in the side.

lso, the correct thing to do is to take a free

shot while Tarou's down.

With all the strays shots being thrown around, Ranma wants the shield's
protection and is willing to take what he thinks is the extra minute or so
to knock Tarou off.

blast would go astray. The only consolation was that he wasn't foolish
enough to hurl his limited strength against the durability of her armor.

It

That's not a consolation.  A consolation would be that he hit her and

broke his

hand.

Will revise.

I fear my erstwhile comrade in arms would fall before your might. So it
behooves me to relieve you of the burden of this fight. Fear not, for I
shall be as gentle with thee as the wind." He danced forward with his

sword.

Thinking about it, the fact that Kuno has gone into hiding and didn't take

his

sister with him rather suggests that he believes that she's behind the
attempts on his life and the death of their parents.  That makes a certain

amount

of success if you ask "Cui bono?".

Actually Kodachi had disappeared and was presumed dead in Cambodia when he
went into hiding. Now that she's back, he might be suspicious, though. And
Mrs. Kunou had been dead since they were both very young, so Tachi would
only have been suspicious in the case of his father's death.

smile. Anyone else wouldn't fall for such a transparent trick, but Speed
Demon was only physically fast, not mentally.

but Speed Demon's swiftness was physical rather than mental.

Much better.

Swordsman looked curiously at the object. "An egg? You would assault me

with

poultry products? Truly you are no challenge at all. But since you seem

to

What a fowl attack!

^_^

Ironically, Taro lied about not being willing to give up an advantage in

combat.

The Abramination is undeniably an advantage and he was refraining from

using

it.

True. He wanted to do it using his natural abilities at first, to prove what
a tough guy he was. But when things took to long, he decided to go with what
would solve things quickly.

About 33% of the Iron Rose's systems had come back on line when she saw
Power Man land only a few meters in front of her.

"Oh dear." She looked at the display, focusing on one system in

particular.

Maybe she should have just played dead.

As it turns out, though she did help wear PM down some more, as well as
inadvertently triggering Ryoga's change.

You know, this is exactly the moment when Kasumi planned to make her debut
and turn the tide.  Too bad she couldn't get out of the landing gear.

Heh. Yep. This was it. Now she's going to have to try and save the day
without their support.

At least that was what he thought until the Hulk slammed into him full
force. Nearly half of the coolant system was destroyed as the

That hardware must be pretty damn redundant.

Yep, though it's going to have to be repaired very soon.

"Does that mean Hulk has evil twin brother?"

If he did, it would be The Leader.

Always liked the original stovepipe head version myself. Still loved the
humor issue of What If? which had a one panal 'What If --You Were in a Movie
Theater and had to Sit Behind The Leader' :)

prevent a pair of sais from being buried in his back. "Don't you ever

give

up?"

You know, just like with every Japanese noun, I prefer the plural of "sai"

to

be "sai".  There's something about "sais" that just looks weird.

Not sure which is correct, myself.

"Thou didst destroy mine hair!" she raged.

Kind of endangers Akane's secret identity.

Damage never really transferred over from one form to the other in Thor's
transformations as I recall. And since Thor's hair was longer than Don
Blakes, I'm assuming Akane's hair will be fine.

Thanks for all the help. It was very useful and I used pretty much
everything.

D.B. Sommer




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