Month and a half late? eh.

It was good, down, and grim. Indeed, all I have are a few
recomendations to make it worse. One good thing to throw in would
be a few understated hints of other symptoms. Comments like "I'm
just so tired" and few never really resolved indications of stuff
that comes with depression. Perhaps note they lived in a house
that seemed perpetually cold, but turning the thermostat up made
it unpleasant? The mirroring brooding of Shinji and Yuko was
nice, but you never develop it, just tell us that it happens. Try
to leave more for us to derive on our own.

Miashara

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