Doubtless many of these things will have been caught by others, but 
what the hell.  

was there that the bulk of the machinery resided. Soft hums and loud
throbbing noises could be felt permeating the air. It was like a giant
factory that had been lef
neck and traveling on her back. The quintet of heroes landed safely and
stood on the far side of the cavern, gazing at the machinery before >them.

Somebody did a little too much deleting.  

lower and upper torso. A white 'M' and 'W' crossed over one another in >red
section of the upper body. 

Geez, I don't remember Speed Demon looking like that at all.  More importantly, what 
does "in red section" mean?

The other newcomer, who had spoken earlier, was far more subdued. He >was
wore loose white pants and shirt, and had a vest and bracers made of 

Delete "earlier".  It adds no meaning and gives an untrue impression that it was more 
than a second ago that he spoke.  

Captain Japan smirked. "If my name was something as stupid as Pantyhose, I'd
have been happy to call myself just about anything else. Even something as
lame as 'The Dazzler'."

Iron Duck!

"Yeah, It's even dumber than that idiot Whizzer's  name," Hawkeye laughed.

"Yeah.  It's 

"Those are some seriously nice breasts," Power Man said as he swung his fist
at Thor.

For just a split second Thor was taken aback. Reflexively she was about to
shout out she had no interest in perverts. Unfortunately that left her open

The difference between Thor and the real Akane is that the real Akane would
suddenly become invincible for a moment after that comment as she exacted
retribution.  

was beneath her to deal with these underlings. She was Thor, scion of the
Realm Eternal. To her the leaders of armies fell.

Well...strickly speaking Odin was the one who kept offing the leaders of armies.  

"Captain Japan, Leinderhosen Man." Captain Japan tried hitting Tarou with
the flat of the shield, but missed as the youth dodged out of the way again.

Leiderhosen Man

"You do. I'm just toying with you." Tarou proved his point by throwing a
straight punch towards Captain Japan's face. His longer reach enabled him to

I wouldn't say that proves his point so much as backs his claim.  

At that moment, the shield, which had bounced off a nearby wall, returned.
Tarou intercepted its flight with his back. The blow hurled him several feet
away and stunned him badly enough that he didn't return to his feet
immediately.

The geometry doesn't work.  Assuming that he is facing Cap, Tarou is going to
be knocked forward, not away.  Also, the correct thing to do is to take a free
shot while Tarou's down.  

blast would go astray. The only consolation was that he wasn't foolish
enough to hurl his limited strength against the durability of her armor. It

That's not a consolation.  A consolation would be that he hit her and broke his
hand.  

I fear my erstwhile comrade in arms would fall before your might. So it
behooves me to relieve you of the burden of this fight. Fear not, for I
shall be as gentle with thee as the wind." He danced forward with his sword.

Thinking about it, the fact that Kuno has gone into hiding and didn't take his
sister with him rather suggests that he believes that she's behind the 
attempts on his life and the death of their parents.  That makes a certain amount
of success if you ask "Cui bono?".  

smile. Anyone else wouldn't fall for such a transparent trick, but Speed
Demon was only physically fast, not mentally.

but Speed Demon's swiftness was physical rather than mental.  

Swordsman looked curiously at the object. "An egg? You would assault me with
poultry products? Truly you are no challenge at all. But since you seem to

What a fowl attack!

Ironically, Taro lied about not being willing to give up an advantage in combat.
The Abramination is undeniably an advantage and he was refraining from using
it.  

About 33% of the Iron Rose's systems had come back on line when she saw
Power Man land only a few meters in front of her.

"Oh dear." She looked at the display, focusing on one system in particular.

Maybe she should have just played dead.  

You know, this is exactly the moment when Kasumi planned to make her debut 
and turn the tide.  Too bad she couldn't get out of the landing gear.  

At least that was what he thought until the Hulk slammed into him full
force. Nearly half of the coolant system was destroyed as the

That hardware must be pretty damn redundant.  

"Does that mean Hulk has evil twin brother?"

If he did, it would be The Leader.  

prevent a pair of sais from being buried in his back. "Don't you ever give
up?"

You know, just like with every Japanese noun, I prefer the plural of "sai" to
be "sai".  There's something about "sais" that just looks weird.

For his part, the A-bra-mination began to grow worried. Not the type of
all-out fit of panic worried, his control over his emotions was too good for

Delete "the type of"

Thor grit her teeth, firming her resolve. This was no time for doubt. The
key to victory for her forces was before her. This mere mortal sought to

gritted (or ground)

"Thou didst destroy mine hair!" she raged.

Kind of endangers Akane's secret identity.


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