DB Sommer wrote:
An interlude. Should be able to do this rather quickly:
Grunting, Ukyou turned her attention back upwards,
unsure about that comma
Will consider.
of circuitry nestled in an inordinately oversized bundle of
insulated wire. "What the hell were they thinking when they made
this ship?"
Time is of the essence? :)
Exactly!
"Yes," Ukyou grumbled. "But you said that I have to check an AX-15
for damage. Not an RN. This might be part of the ship's systems, not
the training module, for all I know."
Heh.; Good point. Wouldn't want to make a boo-boo with that.
I imagine not.
Slipping her hands beneath the levers to open the hatch, Ukyou
grunted, planting her feet on the wall containing the hatch
lot of hatches. I'd try to rephrase to cut some.
Will do.
"Um... white-red to pin twenty eight
twenty-eight
Whoops.
Shampoo sighed, shaking her head, and grateful that Akane had decided
an old skirt could be cut into hair-ties. "Don't know. I have
feeling we will see Ranma again. Don't know why."
Shampoo: Maybe it because the author keep doing these interludes.
Huh. I guess it is kind of misleading.
Short, pointless, and the second of three. Save, collect, trade for
swell prizes!
I No-Prize? I could always use one of those. :)
Well, there are no prizes YET...but maybe you can get a reaver plushie.
Nice work, though as you said, very short.
Well, compared to the chapters proper, yeah. Thanks for taking the
time to C&C for me! :)
D.B. Sommer