Additonal Notes: All comments and criticism are greatly appreciated. 
The
new characters, while appearing to be the centerpiece of the fic, are
not so and are in no way Mary Sues. I also find it a sad state of
affairs that, when prompted with new characters, the reader's first
reaction is "Pfft, another self-insertion" rather than "Boy, I wonder
what the author has planned for these clownboats."

It is only natural that when wondering such a thing, that the suspicion
will cross their mind that the author intends to continue as he began.  

For example.  Delacroix performs his drill sergeant routine and all the 
senshi just stand there meekly and take it, not even one of them 
responding to his threat to murder them if they don't obey him. If they 
were this passive in this chapter, why will they be less so in 
subsequent ones?  Why not have Usagi, for example step forward and 
introduce herself and the others right after "I'm Way Tougher Than You 
Girls" finishes off the critter?    

The dream sequence, on the other hand, was very well done.


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