The three travelers walked along the long abandoned mountainside road;

which

was in severe disrepair, composed of cracks and crevices with small

patches

of uneven-road in-between.  Their path was bounded on the right by a
guardrail, heavily twisted and missing several long sections,

overlooking

a

deep valley.

    Not sure you want that semi-colon there; it might go better placed
between 'disrepair' and 'composed' (not sure about that).

Someone else suggested a colon in the same place.  My poor colon, comma,

and

semi-colon skills are shining brightly.  Although my natural inclination

is

to agree with your suggested placement, I wonder if someone else might

pipe

up?

    Sir! Piping up, Sir!

    Properly punctuated and using slightly better grammar, it would be:

The three travelers walked along a long-abandoned mountainside road, which
was in severe disrepair.  It was mainly composed of cracks and crevices,
with small patches of uneven pavement in-between.  Their path was bounded on
the right by a guardrail that was heavily twisted and missing several long
sections, and overlooked a deep valley.



   Ja mata,
   Larry F

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