Ginrai wrote:
Woo-hoo! C&C only a few hours after I posted! ^_^
I try. :)
*gasp* A Ginrai post? Might it be more of Crossing the Line? Finally?
Umm.... Next question! ^_^;
Ah, drat. :p
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?" Ranma screamed back at the
Furinkan High kendo team captain, glad to have his mind occupied by
something else for the moment. If there was one thing the martial
artist was sure about with concern to the current situation, it's that
Kunou was invited _not_ because he was Akane's choice. 'More than
likely so that he doesn't cause any problems later on.'
it's that -- it was that
_not_ because he was -- because he was _not_ (?)
Not so sure about this one.
Me neither. Judges?
Shinnosuke, though, was adamant with his view. "But I tell you,
it's a giant chicken! _A_ _giant_ _chicken_!"
*snicker*
Would you believe a boy who tends to forget most of what he's seen? ^_^
Good point.
'garbage' -- I don't know why (I'm probably being nitpicky) but this
strikes me as a rather rough word for Kuno to say.
It is. Just wasn't able to think of anything else at that time ^_^;
Trash? Offal?
Does he consider Shinnosuke a friend?
Considering Shinnosuke doesn't seem to have any sort of vendetta
against Ranma and he did save Akane before.
Fair enough.
"Mount Jusendo?" Ranma whispered. "I... well, what I mean to say
is...." The pigtailed boy silently cursed himself at his inability to
tell the truth even at this point. Taking a deep breath, he blurted
out, "Yes! I did say 'I love you!' on Mount Jusendo!" Softly, he
added, "But I guess it's too late now."
Suggest dropping the 'himself at'.
Does sound better without it.
Missed one -- 'this point' -- 'that point'. Tenses. ;)
Konatsu: She wouldn't be the first girl.
Konatsu the manly cross-dressing ninja? Very different....
I think I'll allow Adrian Tymes to write that ^_^
Yeep! This should be interesting.
"RANMA! I...." Sheepishly, the Lost Boy realized he couldn't
think of a good enough reason to tell him.
Tell him what?
About why he was so worried about who Akane chose.
Aaaaaah....
"T-tw-two Akanes?" Ryouga said, aghast at what he saw.
I'd think most of the boys there would be delighted at the prospect
of another Akane. ;)
Heh, true.
But after what they heard from one Akane, it would be a bit surprising.
Also true.
This logic is much like the Cthulu of Lovecraftian horror. If it
makes sense, you're already mad.
Hehehehe
And it makes sense to me, so it's too late. ;p
You're not the only one ^_^
Oh, that's good to know.
"Nabiki said she was going to get someone here today that would
help out with the advertising. I wonder where could he be." Holding
that off as something to question her sister about later on, Akane
asked, "So what do you think of the idea?"
later on -- on later (?)
I think the original was correct.
You are correct. I made an error on that line; it should have read:
about later on -- on later (can drop 'about' -- however, this is
entirely optional.)
Hah!
It was not a good day for Chicken Boo ^_^
Probably just got back from the Masaki shrine. ;)
I liked it. It was much better than 'Cats'. I'm going to read it,
again and again. (Place that quote, and win a cookie!)
Unfortunately, I have no idea ^_^;
"Almost live", 'The Hypnotist'.
Keep up the good work, Gin. Very funny.
Glad you liked it!
Thanks a lot for the C&C!
No problem. :)
Ginrai