Hmm, very interesting.  Please continue it! :)

Most of my C&C is on your formatting, but I have a few comments on the story, here and there.

So that it will be a bit more clear what I'm pointing out, I'm sending this with line-wrapping on my message turned off.
[Yeah, I'm being a bit of hypocrit here -- do as I say, not as I do ;)]

Vampyr3 wrote:

info : The story arc is after both ends of Ranma 1/2 and Sailor Moon, and in Ranma 1/2 the Saotome's house is still not repaired and the Saotome are living at the Tendo House.

This sentence wasn't line wrapped.

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Silence...



That was all that greeted her in this brand new day. No bird's chirping. Not the low hum of electricity. Not the muffled rumbling of engines. Not the insistent noise of an alarm clock. Nothing to greet her but the gentle whistling of... wind? Wait, that was not it... It was more like the sound of someone's breathing. She wasn't alone? That made her awake faster. She feels the cold touch of fear creep up her spine.  Her heart quickened as adrenaline began to course through her veins.

Nor was this first paragraph.

She looked around the room. Everything was racked. The walls were cracked. The floor looked like it hasn't been swiped in years. The furniture was ruined. There was debris everywhere.  Simply put, everything was in shambles. ("Where am I?") she asked herself, not recognizing the room. ("What is this place?") It

looked like it was made if wood. (Wood? I thought the room was pearl white.

Must have been a dream...)

The first line of these three is long, and should have had a newline, the second two are "ok" lengths, but you really ought to wrap to 70 or 72 characters.

Hmm, what a place to wake up to!  Poor her.

Although she didn't know were she was there was still a sense of familiarity.

Suddenly she realized where she was: the Tendo's house, right in the middle of

The Tendo's house, or what was left of it :)

the sitting room.  Near her where the Tendo's middle daughter, Nabiki, and her

own son, Ranma. A flash of gold came through her mind for a second, but she

inputted it to the night's dream.

I would suggest, "but she dismissed it as part of the night's dream."

This paragraph was lined wrapped, but to a rather longer length than 70 characters.

The three of them were all sprawled around the sitting table... or what was left

of it.  Now fully awake, she noted that the room itself has seen better days.

(Looks like my son's fiancee brigade visited again.) She mused.

Just the three of them there?  I wonder where everyone else is?

And does she really think of all of the girls after Ranma as a "fiancee brigade?"  Sure, some of us FFML readers do, but is that how she does?

Also, surely she saw/knew of the damage before she fell asleep... why is she musing on what might have caused the damage now?

She managed got up, after freeing herself of her son's arm that pressed on her.

A quick glance at the garden told her that there was a problem. It was ravaged.

The pond was empty, the little tree siding it was not there, and the grass was

replaced by mud. Even the wall surrounding the Tendo estate was just a pile of

pebbles.

Man, what a mess!  I wonder how *this much* damage could possibly have been caused?!  Surely the Tendo home wouldn't have gotten destroyed the same way as the Saotome home was, I hope?

Trembling a little, she walked outside, not caring about the fact that she wore

no shoes. What stood not that far away triggered something in the back of her

mind. With eyes not of her own she looked through distant memories and she saw a

royal court with sublime resses, an imposing palace pearl white, and peace all

around. She saw people she knew and yet didn't recognize either.



Troubled by all these mental pictures, she shacked her head to clear it, 

Heh.  

and then looked back at the structure that messed up her head.

So she's just noticing it, or did she see it before she fell asleep?

What she saw was a magnificent pearl white palace, looking a lot like the one

she saw in her little spell. And yet this one was different...



It was made of crystal...

Whee!  So Neo-Queen-Serenity's Crystal Palace has appeared, and it turns out that Nodoka happens to have had a previous life on the moon kingdom.
I wonder what happens next.

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Author's notes : I'm cowriting this fic with Oberon

We are still curently working on the title... but we are using the plot I posted several month ago... since nobody took it, I'll have to write it myself, I worked a lot in it since then and I hope to be able to make something good out of it.

The best person to develop an idea into a story is the person who thought up an idea in the first place.  If someone *had* written your story for you, then it probably would have come out rather differently from how you wanted.

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