--- "Ragun P. Moody" <Kichigai@tds.net> wrote:

	$Heh, this C&C isn't late.  I've done C&C that was
late, and this isn't
late.  It may not be on time, exactly, but it isn't
late.

*gives evil eye* So THAT'S your excuse?!?!?

"Aw, c'mon," I whined teasingly. "It'll be fun, Kait
Sith!"

	$That line nearly made me delete this out of hand. 
Cait Sith?  Eww.

I will admit, when it comes to sex I try to sling out
as many jokes as I can.
 > 	$Too many elipses.  Why don't you actually end
some

of those sentances?

Because this is the sentence that never ends... it
just goes on and on my friends...

Actually, it's just that I think out the dialogue
first, and whenever somebody just trails off the
sentence without pronouncing a definite . ? or !, I
use ...

	$As I said, that's a risky thing to do.  I was in a
hurry and I _very_
nearly deleted this.  Kinda glad I didn't, though.

What is fanfiction without risk?!?!?

A safe fanfiction, maybe?

Should I hate her? Should I like her? Technically,
we ARE competing
over the same man... but still, I think that we
could be friends.

	$man, but, still, I think

Ah! But then I have too many commas! 
 

Or maybe I'm just being nice again. Why do I have to
be so damned
_nice_? Why can't I be greedy for once? I could have
Cloud... if I
was willing to take him away from Tifa. But she
needs him...

	$Come on, combine some of that.

No! Biiiida!

Okay, I'm just feeling strance today...
 

But don't _I_ deserve to be selfish sometimes? Why
do I always have
to be the one giving away pieces of myself to other
people? WHY?!

	$Destiny.  Luck.  Lack of the ability to say NO.

AERIS: NO! NO NO NO NO NO NO NO! See? I can say it!
^_^
 
 

I felt Cait Sith's soft stuffed hand on my shoulder
and shook

	$And now you're using Cait?  Be consistent.

?? What do you mean?

matter how silly they might seem. Even though it'll
be really
dangerous, so Aeris, Tifa, you stay behind..."

	$Heh, that's the complete opposite of my party.

I always use Tifa myself, but that's just because of
her... um... huge.. tracts of land...

Actually, Cloud's always using that line, so I figured
it to be appropriate.

I suddenly started hoping that it would never end...
that things
would go on like this forever. Because I had the
strange feeling
that if things did end, if Cloud had to choose
between Tifa and I,
he would make the wrong choice, for the wrong
reasons...

	$Depending, of course, on the player.

CLOUD: Barret, it's you that I truly love!

BARRET: Cloud... you're not gettin' my Kalm Light.

CLOUD: Damn!

 
 

I felt a nudge at my forearm. "Huh? Whazzat?" I
lifted my head
slowly, (the world was spinning really fast and I
didn't want to risk
throwing myself off) gradually bringing a familiar
pair of breasts
into view.

	$That was really all you needed to recognise her. 
Indeed, it was all
anyone ever used, since no one had ever actually
looked at her face.

Yup! Faces unnecessary! 

TIFA: Keep your damn eyes up!

"We've been looking all over for you, Aeris! Cait
Sith thought that
you'd gone out into the wilderness to think by
yourself, but I
thought that maybe..."

	$Tifa: You'd gone out there to, ah, 'explore your
inner self', and I
might be able to help.

Come on, I may be blatant, but I'm hardly THAT
blatant...

"Nothin'. She paid as she got it, Ma'am."

"Good."

	$Tifa:  Because I'm broke, and I would have had to
leave your drunk ass
on the floor to be sold into prostitution.

AERIS: Huh? Whazzat?

Well. Anyone who says that taking a cold shower cuts
down on arousal
has never taken one while a beautiful woman's
breasts press into your
back.

	$I know THAT to be true.

Ah, it's the little truths in life that make a story
work!

small cup to my lips.

	$Tifa: Now, be a good girl and swallow this
rohypnol.  I promise this
won't hurt a bit.

*falls to the ground and starts laughing madly*

Some small part of me wondered if this made me a
lesbian,

	$Generally defined as plastic sexuality.  One gay
act does not make you
gay.  Neither does several.

AERIS: What about... *starts counting on fingers*
Um...
 

But all that was distracting me from the points at
hand; namely, the
ones on Tifa's breasts.

	$Oooh, bad sexual pun.  I approve.

There's such a thing as a GOOD sexual pun? 

 

you..." I lifted my fingers to my mouth and licked
them clean of her
juices. Tifa tasted so different from how I
remembered Zack tasting,

	$Than Zack's?  Seems kind of odd to be comparing a
girl's juices to a
guy's.

Wouldn't know. Haven't tasted a guy... but girls do
taste different.

Ha! I put the elipses thing in there just to tick you
off!
 

I put my fingers back where she wanted them, moving
my other hand
down to myself as I watched her body move and writhe
delightfully,
her breasts shifting in fascinating ways with each
slight movement...
then I touched her clitoris with my thumb, and it
was too much for
her. She screamed and came, her hips lifting above
the bed as her
eyes shut and her body shook.

	$Yes indeed, all girls in lemons can come like a
thrown switch, and
about as quickly.

Well, it is fanFICTION, after all.

She looked amazed for a moment, then she laughed
too. "Yeah, well...
I am pretty good buddies with Richard Palmer and his
five friends."

	$HAH!  That's great!  And here I thought I knew
almost all of them.  I
mean, I've heard of Rosy, but not Richard.  Heh, I
just opened up WinAmp
and started Robert Palmer- Addicted to Love playing.
 With a cue like
that, how could I not?

Actually... not to shatter any of your illusions... I
made it up on the spot.

I sat up and nudged her arm. "Where did the tongue
come into it,
then?"

	$Tifa: What, are you just trying to get another
demonstration?  You
know perfectly well where the tongue entered into
it.

GAWD I'd wished I'd thought of that line!

Tifa shrugged, breasts rolling again with the
motion.

	$Yes, but that pretty much goes without saying.

*looks a bit superior* Description is the key to good
storytelling.

Well, incidental stuff... When Aeris dies, if you
have Tifa in your
party, she runs her hand along Aeris's jawline, then
runs away in
tears... it COULD be a friendly gesture, but it
seems more like
something a lover would do.

	$Although I never made much of it myself, I can see
that as a good
enough excuse for a PWP yuri lemon.  Most people
don't even bother with
that much of an excuse.  While I wouldn't say this
had much of a plot,
really, it did have a better than average setup.

Really, I hadn't ever thought of it that way myself
until I was going through the game again recently,
just to tag down the dialogue FOR the Barret date...
too bad I didn't get it...

But now, armed with a FAQ, I can do it!!

Not that I've got any urge to, with FFX to run to...
 

I suppose the only reason I made anything of it is
because I was
already hammering this thing out in my mind.

	$Unh huh.  That I believe.

You should believe it! Really, you should!
*desperately* Why doesn't anyone believe me when I say
that I didn't think of this fic until a friend claimed
there wasn't enough yuri on her website!!

	Well, anyway, it was cute.  I liked the Richard
Palmer bit, too.  Few
real mistakes, other than I disagreed with your use
of elipses, but
that's a pretty common gripe with me and I wouldn't
be too worried.
Flowed well, good descriptions, smooth dialog.

AND I DISAGREE WITH YOUR USE OF ELIPSES!!!

So we agree to disagree. Kick-ass.
 

	I do think you should have spent more time on the
sex.  But hey.

*sigh* Pervert.

AERIS: I think you should have spent more time on the
sex, too!

TIFA: Yeah, I came too quick! Now everybody's gonna
think I'm a slut!

Um...

Aaron Bergman
iamfanboy@hotmail.com
"There is a madness to my method... UWAHAHAHA!"

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