The below is of course, my opinion only, and should be taken with a whole
shaker of salt, in many cases.

I won't do a line by line, as is all to frequently the case my muse is
not providing insightful or humorous comments, and I did not notice any
grammar or spelling errors to correct.

Well, you've made it past the "keep me interested for two chapters" hump.
 The flashbacks work nicely, and have me intrigued as to what will happen
next and what's really going on.

The only real complaint I have is that I want more. ;)

Keep up the good work!


           Aaron Nowack
"Never let reality get in the way of a good hypothesis."
http://www.geocities.com/anowack/
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