Time to C&C something that's not by Brian Randall...

Semi-Official C&C Disclaimer:  Everything that comes out of my mouth...
err... keyboard is merely my not particularly humble opinion, and may be
neither correct nor useful.  Hopefully, however, some of it will be one
or the other.

Not gonna do a line-by-line, as I didn't notice anything to nitpick...

Overall, I 'm very impressed.  Excellent description, something that
always makes me envious as my own descriptive skills are lacking.  I very
much enjoyed reading this, and am looking forward to whatever you write
in the future.

Only thing that irritates me is that I had a similiar story idea
gathering steam, and now you've gone and done it better than I can hope
to. ;)


           Aaron Nowack
"Never let reality get in the way of a good hypothesis."
http://www.geocities.com/anowack/
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