Hmm, More POE.

Grunting, Ukyou turned her attention back upwards, to the small board
of circuitry nestled in an inordinately oversized bundle of
insulated wire. "What the hell were they thinking when they made
this ship?" Ukyou growled. "This stupid-- ugh. Hang on. I need a
grounding strap."

"What's wrong?" Shampoo asked, ducking her head to be visible in the
small crawlspace, holding the requested grounding strap out to Ukyou.

She slid herself out of the access-way, shaking her head, and shot
the instructor a baleful glare. "Idiots can't make the damn thing
look remotely like the schematics!"

"They had less than two months to get several ships assembled," the
man noted flatly. "You're running slow."

KP:  I miss his meaning when he says, "You're running slow."  I assume it's
in reference to how fast they're completing the test, but it's a bit of a
non-sequiter and a little jarring in terms of following the conversation.

Ukyou growled further obscenities beneath her breath, and snapped the
grounding strap into place on her wrist. "Can you see that I'm
secure?" she mumbled at Shampoo, checking the tool kit at her waist
before drifting back into the service hatch.

KP:  Did you mean, "Can you see _if_ I'm secure?" The way it's currently
worded reads a little awkwardly.

Ukyou slipped out of the narrow service hatch, as the technician
attempted to wriggle in with her. "Bleah," she whispered to Shampoo,
who was watching the entire scene with a somewhat dubious
expression. "This is stupid."

"He probably very lonely," Shampoo whispered back.

KP:  Heh

Shampoo nodded emphatically. "Glad we share room."

KP:   I like Shamps here.  Nice job of bringing out her humor.

"Pain in the ass," Ukyou mumbled, knuckling back a yawn of her own.
"I'm betting yours is going to be a bitch, too."

"Lovely," Akane grumbled. "How long have we been going?"

"A month," Shampoo said thoughtfully. "Rest well, Ukyou. More
navigation training today, Akane?"

KP:  I was wonderering how long they had been gone for. ^^

Short, pointless, and the second of three. Save, collect, trade for
swell prizes!

KP:  Nice none-the-less.  Thanks for sharing^^




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