noirchloe wrote:
Hmm, More POE.
It's always something. :)
"They had less than two months to get several ships assembled," the
man noted flatly. "You're running slow."
KP: I miss his meaning when he says, "You're running slow." I assume it's
in reference to how fast they're completing the test, but it's a bit of a
non-sequiter and a little jarring in terms of following the conversation.
"We made do with limited time and resources. So should you."
Ukyou growled further obscenities beneath her breath, and snapped the
grounding strap into place on her wrist. "Can you see that I'm
secure?" she mumbled at Shampoo, checking the tool kit at her waist
before drifting back into the service hatch.
KP: Did you mean, "Can you see _if_ I'm secure?" The way it's currently
worded reads a little awkwardly.
Didn't think it was worded awkwardly -- I speak in that manner -- but
I can adjust it.
"He probably very lonely," Shampoo whispered back.
KP: Heh
Shampoo nodded emphatically. "Glad we share room."
KP: I like Shamps here. Nice job of bringing out her humor.
Just a little, anyway.
"A month," Shampoo said thoughtfully. "Rest well, Ukyou. More
navigation training today, Akane?"
KP: I was wonderering how long they had been gone for. ^^
Yeah, well, they're also going really slowly....
Short, pointless, and the second of three. Save, collect, trade for
swell prizes!
KP: Nice none-the-less. Thanks for sharing^^
Glad you liked it!