In a message dated 1/22/2002 3:18:36 PM US Mountain Standard Time, 
sommer@3rdm.net writes:

And getting on to the next part already:

Wow... Dat wuz quick...

 >     "ONE!" Catseye shouted, and chucked the first volley of knives.
 >
 >     Terra watched the throw pattern and saw that they were
 > designed to just barely miss her.
 
 I have a feeling that pattern will change momentarily.

'Course! Plot setup n' such, y'know. ^_^

 >     Catseye pulled out a third set of knives. This time, there
 > was a much stronger gleam in his eye than during the other throws.
 >
 >     Hermione stood up from the front row of the bleachers and
 > declared, "Stop! There is a deadly toxin on those blades!"
 
 Hermione; I reigster it as nicotine
 
 Catseye: That's because I was smoking when I held them earlier, you twit

Heh heh!

Hermione: I register it as NICOTINE!

Catseye: That's because I was SMOKING when I held them earlier, you twit!

Iolanthe(hands on hips): Well, that's a controlled substance, bub!

Althea: Yeah, not like marijuana or coca leaves!

Pyra: The punishment is DEATH by dinky magic!

(Everyone powers up and starts blasting Catseye with their tiny,
little attacks.)

Catseye(glowers as the shots ping off of him without any effect)

 >     That was when the ex-galactic destroyer knew something was
 > up. She saw that the knives were aimed for critical areas of her
 > body: her heart, her neck, and both eyes. She also could sense the
 > poison coating the blades. It was a rare neurotoxin that could
 > easily render a girl, or a pack of elephants for that matter,
 > twenty kinds of dead before she or they even felt the prick of the
 > knife. Nasty stuff. Catseye was a lot more intelligent than for
 > what she had given him credit.
 
 True

They always are, though usually not enough to win.

The Macross "villains" weren't particularly unintelligent, but they lost
anyway... And they weren't really villains. They were just "misunderstood..."

 >     <Another assassination attempt! Red alert! Shields up!>
 
 So others have tried to kill her before?

Yup! Check chapter 4 on the website:
http://lwf58.tripod.com/fan_fiction/ben-oliver/index.html

Apparently, despite Terra's best efforts, some people have figured it
out.

Funny that Queen Serenity and Sailor Pluto seem to be the last
people to make that discovery...

 >     She couldn't use her _real_ power, due to the risk of exposing
 > herself, and her Knight in Shining Armor was being unresponsive. She
 > couldn't teleport him in. It'd look weird
 
 You can say that again.

Hoo-yeah! Especially from where he is now.

 >     The girl bowed her head and focused her energies toward the
 > broken prism she still had clipped to the front of her dress. Inside
 > the closed pendant, the little bits of pink crystal reformed around
 > the core.
 
 This should be fun.

Was it? ^_^

 >     The Younger Inner Senshi ran to stand between Catseye and
 > Terra. The ringleader's two sailor-suited companions stood behind
 > him, immobile.
 >
 >     As their training had brainwashed them into doing,
 
 Heh. Nice way to phrase it

Why bother dancing around? It's best to just cut straight to the truth
and be done with it. ^_^

 >     "--challenge you, the ringleader of this no-good, low-down
 > circus," Chibivenus turned her head and spat, "to come up with better
 > acts!" She impatiently tapped her thumb against the palm of her other
 > hand. "Practice, rinse, repeat! Break an arm! Stage on! In the words
 > of the Great Venusian Philosopher, Al, cry DISCO, and release the
 > clowns of yore!"
 
 I think she lost it somewhere in there.

Althea: Well, I, um, just get really excited before a fight!

 >     "Soap Bubbles," Sailor Chibimercury began, building up a blue
 > glow around her, "Spray!"
 >
 >     A splattering of slippery foam splattered across all of the
 > Chibisenshi.
 
 Heh. Nice way to worm their way out.

Even dinky little worthless attacks can serve SOME purpose. ^_^

 >     Super-Duper Sailor Chibimoon crouched down and followed up with
 > a spinning, flaming uppercut that fried its way from Catseye's sternum
 > up to his chin. "Shroy-you-ken!"
 
 Heh

Of course, the big moves also have their place...

 >     Super-Duper Sailor Chibimoon stood up as tall as a ten-year-old
 > girl could, cracked her knuckles, then placed her left thumb and
 > index finger at the crescent moon on her tiara. In a smooth, upward
 > motion, she slipped it off and held it out in her hand where it
 > became a bright disc of light. With a satisfied grin, she questioned
 > Catseye, "Hey, clown! Ever dance with a Sailor in the pale Earth-
 > light?"
 
 Nice paraphrase

With a Jack Napier quote, you can't lose!

 >     "Of course!" agreed Sailor Jares.
 >
 >     Terra held out her hand and fired the disc toward Catseye,
 > aiming low to ensure that he would have a most excruciatingly slow
 > and painful death.
 
 Nice touch

Terra LIKES causing pain and anguish among those she does not like. ^_^

 >     "The Pink Sugar Cardiac Arrest Glaive!"
 
 Just plain evil.

Since she'd devoured an elder Sailor Saturn, I figured that she'd still
have an obsession with glaives...

Either that or she just really, REALLY likes them. ^_^

Terra(a gleam in her eye as she polishes the blade of her glaive):
I like sharp things!!!

 >     "THREE!" Althea called. "RUN AWAY! RUN AWAY!"
 
 Smart move

Probably the best move they could have made...

 >     Super Sailor Chibimoon halted her energy-charging efforts and
 > held her staff high. "DEATH PINK-RIPPING SILENCE SUGAR-GLAIVE
 > REINCARNATED DANCE DANCE BLACK WALTZ REVOLUTION SURPRISE WITH A
 > QUANTUM SINGULARITY ON TOP! FIFTH MIX!!! HA-CHI-CHI-CHAAAAAH!"
 
 I think that will do it all right.

I don't think Terra likes being outdone in the magical phrase department,
either...

 >     "Ulllllpphhh," Sailor Jares groaned, tossed aside underneath
 > the bleachers like a crumpled-up cardboard cup.
 
 Well, at least she's still alive.

Or will be, for a few hours...

 >     "It's her," Sailor Akis confirmed. She pushed herself up on
 > her hands. "She's just imitating Saturn's powers. We can still get
 > her, though! I can feel it!"
 
 Such delusions. Poor Akis

She thinks she's got powers of precognition.

 >     Terra felt her heart rate slow. Her staff suddenly started to
 > feel very heavy to her. Resisting the sensation, she tore her gaze
 > away from the mirror and struggled back into her combat stance.
 
 Hmm. Odd

Yup, sure was. The effect is, however, consistent with Neherenia's
preemptive strikes...

 >     Her vision blurring, her senses fading, and her central nervous
 > system shutting down, the girl collapsed into the outstretched arms
 > of a pale young woman in a black dress.
 
 Hmm.

Queen Neherenia, famous in the later SuperS series and the beginning
of the Stars series. I liked how they took her out in stars.

Only here, she's a bit younger and more idealistic...

 > Okay, anyone see that one coming? (raises a hand)
 
 As I mentioned before. No knowledge of SM, so it did. *Shrug*

I am (sort of) using a real SM villain in here, though...

 Nice work. Lots of action kept things fast paced. Didn't see any grammar
 errors. Nice work once again.

Thank you very much!

And continuing onward:

Forvhaaaaaaaaard, mardtch! Vhan, thoo, tree, forrr!

 >     <Unnnh... What just hit me?>
 
 A mirror. Apparently your reflection really was that horrible.

Ouch. ^_^

Terra(grimaces): But I just spent SECONDS perfecting my face.
(grumble) stupid human genetics... (mumble) bad hair days,
mrphlrackingfrackin...

 >     <-multiple crystalline objects imbedded in ocular vitreous
 > humor.>
 
 Hmm, her eyes?

Yup! She done got sum crystals in her eyes, g'hyuck! ^_^

 >     "No!" Catseye shouted back. He lightly touched his badly
 > burned face. "She hurt ME the most! _I_ should be the one to
 > deliver the finishing blow!"
 
 Which will never come at this rate.

No, not at this rate. That's for sure.

 >     "No!" JareJare snapped. "She is a great danger to us all! With
 > her powers, she killed Sailor Saturn, defeated every Senshi in the
 > solar system, dashed Earth's interstellar fleet into pieces, and,
 > and, and... A whole bunch of other stuff, okay?! We have to use all
 > our powers NOW to destroy her before she can hurt anyone else!"
 
 Sound strategy, but I think it's a little late for that.

Sure was...

 >     A massive surge rocked the entire collective mind.
 >
 >     <@#$%@#^#^#^^@$#@$!! THEY'RE USING A PSYCHIC PROBE!>
 
 Hmm. Wonder why she regards this as being so bad.

Maybe she's afraid they'll discover her dirty little secret or something
like that...?

 >     Catseye's scream split the air and he jerked his head backward.
 > Covering his eyes, a trail of blood going down his hands, he pulled
 > his face out of the mirror and tried to back off.
 
 Hmm. I think the damage has already been done.

Wait for it...

 >     "Whew," Catseye breathed a sigh of relief. "That really hurt. I
 > was afraid that she'd have killed me or something like that. I'm sure
 > glad I was wearing my energy-resistant underwear!"
 
 Heh

*Shudder!*

 >     YOU BOUGHT IT AT MERVYN'S, DIDN'T YOU?
 
 Cool. Wondered when he'd pop up.

It ain't over till the grim reaper comes in and starts SPEAKING
IN CAPITAL LETTERS.

 >     Jares turned her head toward the gypsy-Senshi. "But why? It's-"
 >
 >     "She's LYING!!!"
 
 Wonder how she can tell

She thinks she's a precog. ^_^

 >     <Hoooooooooo-kaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay. So there ARE human beings
 > that can defeat a second-level Super-Senshi.>
 
 Yep, and you just met one.

Terra(whaps her head): Yeah, well, you don't have to rub it in!

 >     <What'm I? BRAINDEAD?! We can't! There's no escape route!>
 >
 >     <Besides, where's the fun in a fight unless it's a challenge?>
 
 Oh, I have plenty of fun winning onesided battles. ^_^

That's a good inner dialogue line. I added it.

 >     Young Queen Neherenia looked at her two followers, her face
 > a mask of disdain. "You are all too careless! I told you to destroy
 > her right away!"
 
 Now she's smart. If she was smarter, she'd be repremanding her employees
 after she vaped Terra.

That is true. But we can't have an opposition that's _too_ intelligent.
If we did, then THEY'd win. ^_^

 >     <Do you realize what I look like in this outfit?>
 >
 >     <A strawberry and vanilla ice cream cone with a cherry on
 > top?>
 
 Heh. Cute

Think of it... A girl in Super Sailor Chibimoon's outfit with long red hair.
Lots of pink and white topped with red...

 >     <Knight in Shining Armor, quit going all lovey-dovey on your
 > wife and get down here NOW!>
 >
 >     <Nah, you're doing fine. We're happy where we are.>
 
 Hehehehe. Very nice. I do miss SSK now, though.

He'll be back in a later chapter. You're not gonna believe what happens...

 >     <Listening in on the conversation... It's about us.>
 
 >     "But," JareJare began, looking at her queen, "if she's truly
 > so evil, then why would Queen Serenity adopt her as her daughter?"
 
 Stupidity.

Perhaps... ^_^

 >     The seated young woman slapped her hand against the aim
 
 arm

Oh! Right, fixed it.

 >     Neherenia relaxed slightly. "Good. In answer to your question,
 > the White Moon Queen is obviously unaware of this being's true
 > nature, else
 
 or else (would sound better to me)

Agreed. I fixed that. Thanks.

 >     "Do you really want to rule solar system?" Jares ventured to
 > ask. "Aren't we more into this to get rid of the evil and _save_ the
 > solar system, Queen Neherenia-sama?"
 >
 >     "That does sound like a better reason," Akis added. Her
 > expression was very serious, and for once she did not seem to be in
 > the mood for any laughter.
 
 I'll make it three then. Sounds good to me as well.

Nehie's in it for selfish reasons, but all she really cares about is her 
mirror
and stuff.

 >     "Oh," replied the still semi-coherent Sailor Jares, ignoring
 > the fact that the edges of her outfit were still slowly burning from
 > her experience with Terra. "Dat makes sense." She looked down and
 > stuck out her lower lip, pouting.
 
 Hmm. Terra really sucked a lot of her intelliegnce out of her, eh?

Yeah, caused a degenerative condition as well, in fact.

 >     <Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, sensors indicate that Neherenia is
 > charging up an attack.>
 
 Ah, that explains the pause

Had to explain it away somehow

 > Yes, basically a long battle sequence, but occasionally, it is necessary,
 > especially with a fanfic with this sort of title. ^_-
 
 It works well enough though. I like it as is.

Thanks! I'm glad it worked out. I can't always be sure about these things.

 Now to see to the next part.

My, another one hot on the heels of the last one:

<Shiko> Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaai! </Shiko>

 >     Neherenia shook her head, sighed and pointed her hand at the
 > eye of the storm.
 
 Nice to see she keeps her calm.

Can't have her get too worried. She's the toughest opponent in this
chapter! ^_^

 >     "I do not know what is worse," Neherenia spat and advanced a
 > few steps forward, "your foul deeds, your pitiful defense," she
 > hurled another wave of black energy at the girl, "OR YOUR SEETHING
 > ARROGANCE!!!"
 
 I vote for arrogance.

Yeah, nine billion years of obliterating galaxies can give ya something
of an inflated head, I'd imagine.

I mean, just look at Galactus! He could wipe out the universe with
just a wave of his ego! ^_^

 >     <Is it just me, or is this prism we're using really, REALLY
 > pathetic, even at second-level super modes?>
 
 It is

Indeed. When going for a combat speciality, do NOT study Sailor
Chibimoon's moves.

 >     <Not breaking down. The transformation is not toxic to us, but
 > it does make us vulnerable.>
 >
 >     <And we just figured that out NOW?!>
 >
 >     <Yup!>
 
 Heh. Finally she figures it out.

Too her long enough...

 >     <Yes, we're screwed. Royally, thoroughly, utterly and
 > completely.>
 
 I doubt it. It's still way to early for her to die now.

Yeah, and when she finally DOES die off, she's not going to
be quite so worried...

 >     *BLAAAM!* The focused shot exploded around the girl, burning
 > away the net and sending her limply spinning downward.
 
 Hmm. Wonder if Nehe's recharging again.

Probably.

 >     *CRUUUNCH!!!* Terra went pale. She went limp and released
 > her grip. Her mouth opened wide in shock as she looked down to see
 > her leg, from the knee, bent seventy degrees in the wrong direction.
 >
 >     Neherenia's two golems dove down to assist in the scuffle.
 
 Jare's needed em too. :)

Yeah... Terra's kind of a feisty little girl, isn't she?

 >     <You are near the Gate of Time and have its Guardian very
 > close. Dispose of the Guardian and use the Gate to warn us of the
 > assassination attempt. A split second in the past is all that will
 > be necessary to send the message.>
 
 Hmm. Might work

Seemed like a good idea at the time... ^_^

 >     <My desires are your desires. Not the other way around.>
 >
 >     <But... I. Love. Her!>
 >
 >     <We do not concur.>
 
 And this is where she'll win out, methinks. Terrafying is a bad girl, after
 all. :)

Bad girls always win!!!

And ASK is, after all, just a figment of her imagination, and not the
other way around...

 >     The sixteen-year-old queen's expression softened and she
 > started to giggle. "Hee-hee-hee-hee!"
 
 Oops. That might get Terra the time she needs.

I think it did...

 >     "Haa, eh-haah," the pale queen finally gained the upper hand
 > in her battle to stop laughing. She took several deep breaths and
 > looked down at the injured princess. In the next instant, her
 > sense of humor vanished. "So, you thought that such a simple mind
 > trick as that could save you?"
 
 Actually it probably has.

(nodnod)

 >     <This is the Atomic Starlight Knight, reporting failure.>
 
 I think I remember that chapter. Been a while though.

Yup! From Sailor Pluto's flashback when she was on the Dumbo
Ride with Ranma.

There was a sugar overload that just BEGGED to be put out of its
misery.

 >     Both Asteroid Senshi shot her an evil, pitiless glare. "Die!"
 
 Well, their resolve is firm, you have to admit.

Especially after all they've been through with her.

 >     *SHIIIIIIINNN!* After about four feet of metal were exposed, the
 > blade kept on coming.
 >
 >     Neherenia's overconfident smirk shifted into a frown.
 
 Heh

I mean, that's a big sword there.

 >     "The battle is over," Giles announced, placing the scabbard
 > on his back. He turned to kneel down by Terra. "The forces of good
 > triumph again, eh?"
 
 Not this time.

Hmmm, no, I guess not. ^_^

 > Oh, great, I made up ANOTHER new character.
 
 You make it sound like an accident. :)

Some characters just demand to be created and I can barely
do anything to stop it.

There was this Moon Prince that wanted to be called into
existence (what with the Moon King and Queen getting
back together and going on this HUGE second honeymoon),
but we somehow managed to ignore that and let it not happen
anyway...

 Nice work. Interesting resolution to the conflict. Fight worked well 

enough.

Thanks! I was very worried about getting that to turn out right.

 Will read more as I get the chance and let you know.

Excellent! I like hearing your remarks.

I like to hear when people like what I've written up.

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