"No, I could feel it," repeated Mina. "You know how we all have some
of the characteristics of our Sailor Scout forms even when we're not
transformed? Like, Amy's really smart, Lita's a good fighter, Raye's got
a strong spirit, and you're really brave?"

[Shyeah...right.  She does have a characteristic of her other form as a 
human but it isn't enhanced bravery.  She's super-charismatic.  However 
I think maybe Mina should say, "and you're...um...anyway we all have 
some of the characteristics of our Sailor Scout forms.]

thoughts were racing just as quickly. 'What was that thing?' she asked
herself again and again. 'Electronic, AND alive? That's impossible!

[Please.  A guy with a pacemaker is electronic and alive.  I have trouble
with Jupiter not knowing what a cyborg is, but knowing what telekinesis is.]

    "Mewtwo saved my life," Lina informed him. "Whatever it is, it's not
really evil. It just... doesn't really know what to do with itself."
    Ranma chuckled inwardly. "Yeah, but it doesn't turn into a girl when
it gets wet," he muttered.

[That was a pointless comment.]



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