OK, I really haven't gone through your critique of CHapter one yet, but you
have expressed the same complaints that a lot of people have.  And I thank
you all for it, because you're pointing out a really fatal flaw in my fic.
The Senshi/Scouts, the Captors, and Jackie and Jade are pretty much the
primary protagonisits.  Zhu Shu, Uncle, Black, and the others are supporting
characters; Zhu Shu is there for the subplot with Rei, and is part of *why*
the other groups are ALL there.

Obviously, though, this fic needs a lot of work, since a lot of people are
not seeing my intentions yet!  Looks like I've got a lot of editing to do!

Anyway, I'd like to thank everyone who0 gave me detailed responses, you've
been a great help so far!  I hope you will continue to be as I put this one
through the wringer.

I admit I AM going to try to keep as much of the main plot, including all
characters involved, in the story.  It has been done successfully before...
But there are a lot of other really good points that have been made to me
both privately and publicly that do need to be addressed.  Hopefully, I can
accomplish both.  :)

Thanks again!

Jen

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