only explanation.  He and Nene were trapped.  They would die here.

*No!* Mackie surprised himself with his own ferocity. *I won't
let her die!*

Mackie slammed the magazine into place and lifted his cannon.

Mackie's thought here struck me as out of place.  I'd think
he'd be in a mode of doing-what-needs-to-be-done, without
really thinking about it very much.  Since you don't really
take this any place, why include it?  Suggest you rewrite
as a numbed Mackie watching his own hands act quickly and
precisely, while a voice in his mind wonders what he's
feeling.  (Or something like this; I hope you get the
idea.)

Actually, it's sort of shown at the end of the BGC OVA, Part 8(?), that
there may be a romance between Mackie and Nene.  However, it's only hinted
at, and nothing was ever really mentioned about it, but if I remember
correctly, it was a one sided scene, showing Nene smiling in gratitude
towards Mackie for staying.  Of course, it's been years since I last watched
BGC, so I could very easily be wrong.

--CCMax


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