only explanation.  He and Nene were trapped.  They would die here.

*No!* Mackie surprised himself with his own ferocity. *I won't
let her die!*

Mackie slammed the magazine into place and lifted his cannon.

Mackie's thought here struck me as out of place.  I'd think
he'd be in a mode of doing-what-needs-to-be-done, without
really thinking about it very much.  Since you don't really
take this any place, why include it?  Suggest you rewrite
as a numbed Mackie watching his own hands act quickly and
precisely, while a voice in his mind wonders what he's
feeling.  (Or something like this; I hope you get the
idea.)

Actually, it's sort of shown at the end of the BGC OVA, Part 
8(?), that there may be a romance between Mackie and Nene.
However, it's only hinted at, and nothing was ever really
mentioned about it, but if I remember correctly, it was a one
sided scene, showing Nene smiling in gratitude towards Mackie
for staying.  Of course, it's been years since I last watched
BGC, so I could very easily be wrong.

Yes, I remembered that (there are hints in earlier episodes
as well; OVA2 has Nene falling asleep on Mackie's shoulder;
OVA4, ending, has them seated side-by-side at the pool).

But that's not really my point.  My point is not about what
Mackie's feelings are; it's about having Mackie think this
in the middle of a fire fight.  In OVA8, Nene isn't shown
worrying about Mackie in the middle of her hacking battle
against the rogue boomer; she's too busy.  She reacts to
Mackie mostly at the end, AFTER the danger is over.
(She does have that over-long reaction when Mackie announces
he's staying; I can only say that I have the same reaction
of annoyance when watching that.  Why did she take the
time?  She's got things to do!)

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