Going to try and C&C while I read, hopefully I'll actually get some done
then rather than filing it into a folder where it sits.
The scientist stared upwards also, her mouth a round 'o' of surprise.
"I didn't know he could," she managed. "He's not supposed to use
lasers like that as weapons."
"Is it bad for him?" Ranma asked fearfully.
"Ah... no," Washuu managed. "If he's integrated them, then they won't
be dangerous to him, only... whoever happens to be on the receiving
end."
Interesting. What's the difference between the lasers and the energy weapons
that Ryo-oh-ki uses though? In regards to their effectiveness anyway.
"Not really," Ryu muttered. "I've got the Umisen-ken and the
Yamasen-ken. I don't need much else. The rest... I don't think it'd
be worth it. And I got worse girl troubles than he does, anyway. "
Heh, not likely. Even at this point.
Another corner of his mind quickly filed away what to look for later,
when he had a moment, yet another responding directly to the linkage
he maintained with some layer of Nuku's mind, juking neatly around a
stray projectile. He spun about in air, still sliding backwards, and
another beam of energy swept across the missile, reducing it to
little more than molten vapor, though another stray impulse warned
of potentially toxic material, and he adjusted for that, too.
It wouldn't affect him, but it might hurt Nuku, and that wouldn't do,
so the filters that allowed air to enter the main cabin were sealed,
reworked, refined, and reopened, all in the time it took him to
wheel about once more, orienting himself against the thirty two
remaining warheads.
Efficient little rat, isn't he? :)
The other would allow one to fall not far from his partner. That
didn't suit him, even though it would probably catch Don Hai,
because it would _also_ catch one of the red-haired woman's metal
things, and as tasty as they were, she was _very_ protective of
them. And he didn't want to be kicked.
Heh
"I don't know," Yakumo responded. "They hate that which is of them
and which is not with them, and they are scared of that which they
cannot destroy. That one I do know." He chuckled sardonically,
"That's me. They think I'm one of them."
I always liked Yakumo, though I never quite understood why he wanted to
be human again. Well, aside from the whole "monster's constantly attacking
him no matter where he goes" thing. Speaking of which, any reason some
haven't shown up? Although that was really more because of Pai.
Ami moved to console him, shooting Setsuna dark look and tentatively
putting an arm about Yakumo's shoulders. "Then don't think about
her," she soothed him. "Think about something you love, instead."
Setsuna _a_ dark look
I'm not sure if the 'her," she soothed him.' is correct either. I think you
might have to either drop the 'him' or separate it into it's own sentence away
from the dialogue. I'm not sure about this though, just doesn't sound quite
right to me as it is.
And a tide of searing bright light exploded on the horizon, shining
easily through the buildings between the heart of the city and the
harbor.
Looks like Ranma didn't get to that last missile after all.
More importantly than just the location of buildings, or the number
of rooms in a given building, he knew where all the soldiers were.
Luckily, only a few were in the area he needed to evacuate; the
majority were on the southern side of the city, towards the roads
leading out. Taking a breath to calm himself, he remained hovering
over the fourteen-story building he was on, and split into two.
Though I suppose evacuation would work fairly well. Not sure what the range
on the radiation of a nuclear missile (they were nuclear weren't they?) is
though, which could be as bad in the long run.
And at that precise second, while his eyes were screwed shut in
concentration, the same moment he had established the dimensions of
his wall of force, the object exploded, blinding him even through
his closed eyelids. He heard muffled cursing behind him from the
Marines, and felt a strain not entirely like the time he had
attempted to support an entire collapsed building on his spine to
protect Nonoko.
Well, that answers that :)
Nuku rested uneasily, unsure why the attempt with Ran-oh-ki had left
her so drained, but largely contented to sit with Ranma. She
twitched in her sleep fitfully, and Nuku carefully maintained her
position, arms wrapped around the slightly smaller girl and
restraining her easily. The little part of her mind that told her
how strong her grip was seemed to be damaged, as restraining Ranma,
who was only twitching very slightly, appeared to take a force that
would shred tensile steel.
I'm not sure if attempt is the right word in that first sentence, assuming
she's talking about her and Ran-oh-ohki destroying the missiles, since they
were mostly successful.
"Commodore! We have reports of an attack from Ryouga's group!"
Weren't the radio's all giving off static? Or did that die down?
Anyway, for what it's worth, hope that C&C helps. As with any, it's all in
my opinion, if not just random comments.